The "memory/dream" in this chapter was beautifully written. I can't tell you how much I'm enjoying this story.
Wow, that was really different, the way the timeline went backwards. I liked it.
Ashes (Chapter 22) - Wed 14 Jan 2009
Nice. I liked the flow of the plot line, not too slow, not too fast. The description of everyone in the room for the little "give away Kagome" ceremony was kinda hard to follow though. I don't know if it was the transitions or because I didn't have a clear vision of the room itself. But it was just a little hard to conjure in the minds eye. Oh, and I like Kayade very much b.t.w, she's one of the few original characters that I've really enjoyed. I'm excited for the next intsallment.
Yes, that was difficult to read as it hit a little too close to home.
This story is so awesome, I'm sad that Inuyasha had to die, but the way you've brought the others together in modern times is very well done!
Whisper (Chapter 21) - Tue 13 Jan 2009
Verry good writing. Many gramatical errors though, but nothing that couldn't be fixed with a good beta.
PLEASE consider separating your scene changes with a larger space or filler like "***." It is hard to figure out when you jump from scene to scene with no signal that it has changed.
Overall, the story is very interesting, unique, and compelling. This one eagerly awaits your next update.
Ashes (Chapter 21) - Tue 13 Jan 2009
Wow. Powerful chapter. I enjoyed it very much and am very interested in where you'll go with this. Good luck with everything.
Fluffy Lady (Chapter 21) - Mon 12 Jan 2009
AaawW!! Come on!! What about Tenseiga?! The sword that brings the dead back to life?! And why didn't Sesshomaru just use his speed/orb to get them out of there in the first place? ack... i love this story, honestly i do, but you've got me all twisted up in knots over it!!
This just makes me want to cry.
Save the damsel in distress!!!
woohoo!! Go Kagome!! LOL. Bad Sesshomaru!! You're father is freakin' dead! Honor does not matter to the dead! You can honor his memory by being a good husband/mate to Kagome and father to your unborn child! *grumbles* ass-hole...
Well, it looks like two can play at that game. Perhaps this will release the inner Miko?
This looks like disaster is on the horizon. What Sesshoumaru is doing is very cruel. I can understand Kagome's reluctance to mate with someone whose other half hates you.
How disappointing to know Kagome gave her virginity to Inuyasha, who up and leaves her to see Kikyou in the middle of the night. Typical.
ooh... very intersting... Sesshomaru can be such an ass sometimes! I love this story and want more. :D
mm... so which side is plotting revenge? Hmm... and go kagome for keeping Hojo out of her life! woohoo! now... if she could only regain her memories....
oooh.... i'm so hooked. :D more please!! :D
When I began reading this story, the whole plot of it didn't seem very intersting at all. I decided however, that I would give it a try, so I did. Finding myself being drawn further and further into the story, as I reached the last words, I felt disapointed that I had to stop being emersed in your story. I really enjoyed it, and I am much looking forward to reading more of it.
:)
-FangedBeasty
This is great! What a funny, cute chapter. How can Kagome get out of her commitment to Hojo without being a bitch? I love Rin as a matchmaker.
This is so sweet, I absolutely love this story. I hope you will be able to update it frequently, I would love to read much more...
Oh, no! Don't marry him, Kagome!
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