And this was based off a dream? Oh my, you need a vacation, lady. You're at war in your dreams when you should be dreaming of a very naked Sesshoumaru like the rest of us.... This leaves me very curious for more. Good thing you are so quick in updating.
You have such an amazing imagination. Maybe you should become a writer instead of a criminal investigator. You don't have to be perfect in grammar and punctuation, that's what they pay those kind of people to do for you. You really do have the talent for it and you're very versitile in the types of themes too. Action, adventure, drama, even romance...
Anyway, I'll be looking forward to seeing how Shippou gets Kags away from those creeps. JEN
Well, the idea is very good and your writing is fantastic. The only thing I don´t like is that Rin is again their daughter and I really have enough of that, this topic is so overused it´s not even funny.
I wish she had a son (or a daughter if you insist), but an original character of your creation. It would have been more enjoyable and definitely more creative.