oooh great ending. I hope you'll think about expanding this! I thought it was amazing. Its not often that a S/K is told through the perspective of Inuyasha, so this was an interesting insight!
Inuyasha is definitely green with envy, a very appropriate story for the prompt. However, I think this story would benefit from a quick editing session, as there were a few small errors in spelling/grammar here and there, but other than that this was very well done Dragoness!
This was extremely well written for the prompt of Envy -huggles-. I am glad that Inuyasha sees what he is missing out with Kagome, and I am glad that Sesshoumaru got the girl! Keep up the good work!
Hairann (Chapter 1) - Sun 31 Oct 2010
Very interesting piece, though it could use a good edit. At the beginning you start with first person and switch to third mid paragraph. I would reccomend just keeping to third, as it tends to be easier to write. And I did notice a few mistakes, such as bowls instead of bows, but they would be easy to catch with a quick reread.
Tsuki (Chapter 1) - Sun 11 Jul 2010
That was good, very nicely written :D
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