Hey there!
I read this little bit when you first posted it on LJ, but didn't comment. However, since you've decided to post it here as well, I'll go ahead and gush a bit.
First of all, I love, love, love this new concept! I personally have never seen a fighter Sesshomaru and a ring-side Kagome, but the idea is new and very welcome. You capture both of them very well.
I could practically smell the warehouse as you described it, and I definitely appreicate the very easy flow of the chapter. Everything moved as though I were watching a movie, and I enjoyed the character interaction throughout the piece. Kagome had a little bit of an attitude, and I loved the way she talked to Sesshomaru almost as if she didn't care who he was. I can practically see the annoyed/intrigued expression on his face.
Anyway, before I write a life-story about the chapter, I really enjoyed this, and I can't wait until you update again! Job well done!
~Aubrey
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