aaaaaaaawwwwwwwwwwwww!!!!!!!!! that was sooooooooo ssssaaaadd!!!!! i nearly cryed when i saw that sweet and awesome kagome was going to die and how she sacrificed herself to save rin. i was realy glad when narku died but i had hoped that it would have been a horrible and bad death. good story by the way :)
Awwwwwwwwwwwww, that was so sad. Kagome was just getting happy and Sesshoumaru’s emotional barriers had come down. They were just getting ready to become mates and Kagome died. Waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaah.
Anyway, good story. I liked Etsuko’s description. She was very cute in my mind’s eyes. Okay, Rin’s question about what mating was, was just too funny. Nice idea to put that one it. I think I have to use that idea in one of my stories!
I thought the chapter was very well written and your hard work paid off. It was well written though, as you said in your first chapter, this was a very fast paced story, and boy, it sure was. I do hope your forthcoming stories will have a slower pace.
You have talent in writing, no matter how hard sometimes that may be to do, but you do have talent and awesome imagination. Good luck to you and in all that you do.
Advi.
advi (Chapter 2) - Tue 29 Jun 2010
Oh my, what an emotional chapter, though I felt that it could have been longer. I also wished that Sesshoumaru had longer parts in it, but I loved how we got to see Kagome’s emotions in this.
They were well portrayed, though I wish more character building was involved, but never the less, it was indeed very realistic.
I loved how you portrayed Inuyasha. His emotions were there and I do love how you wrote Sango, though, you misspelled Kirara. The misspelling ‘Kilala’ is actually Viz’s fault, unfortunately. Sigh…
I loved this chapter, though I did think it was too short for my liking, but all in all it was a very good chapter and I am dying in anticipation for the next. Hope there will be more Sesshoumaru parts in it.
Advi
advi (Chapter 1) - Tue 29 Jun 2010
Dear Presto 1995
This first chapter was absolutely amazing. I am already in love with your story, and believe me, I know what it is like to write a ‘supposed’ oneshot and have it turn into something longer! Lol
Yes, this story definitely is very fast paced. Love the villainess you added, wonder if we will be seeing her again. I hope so as I want to know what will happen to her. Oh I do hope Inuyasha comes back into the story – boy is he going to be pissed once he finds out what happened to Kagome. Naraku is one dead bug.
I love how you write Rin, she is so cute in your writings and I love your descriptions of Sesshoumaru. You write Kagome well and that is good to see.
Okay, now I am off to read your second chapter.
Oh, poor Kagome! It would be so hard to have to bear Naraku's child. No wonder she finally had a break-down. Sesshomaru is being awesome...
makenzie (Chapter 1) - Fri 25 Jun 2010
as u wish is from pokemon when entei adopts a practicaly orphaned child and hes all like as u wish
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