omg that puppy is so stubborn but then again i cant imagine that he would be anything but like that. though i kidna want to see him make the younger version of him pay, like a big fight and the younger one's all O_O wtf!?>!?! this was awesome! can't wait to see more!
Okay, my first review of this fic....I am really intrigued by what you are doing here. Please continue. I want to see what you have up your sleeve.
Kagome has yet to show herself (compliments of Mistress Centipede) and she hasn't yet awaken the Hanyou......or are you diverging from that? Hmmmm?
omg i love this story hope you update soon
Hiya! I just wanted to tell you that this story is amazing and I can't wait till you update again!
lots of well wishes! </3
this is so interesting!
you deffinately grab your readers attention right from chapter one. I'd advise that you fill out hte first chapter a little though. Sometimes a little fluff is appreciated by readers. Those extra details help engage us and help us visualize the scenes going on. Great work - I look forward to more.
Hairann (Chapter 1) - Thu 18 Nov 2010
Very interesting start. It could use a bit of work, more details and such, but the main piece of advice I can give you is to edit your summary. The nicknames, all caps and such is a turn off for readers and maybe stopping your story from getting the reads it deserves.
@-@ I really, really like this...you definately had me on the edge of my sit while reading this though agreed I am also wondergin about the tanto though I will hazard a guess and say that somehow it is magical or something along those lines?
I can't wait to see where you take this story!
Keep up the good work!
Ikaru (Chapter 1) - Tue 16 Nov 2010
This was a well written story, and I must say it had me on the edge of my seat until the very end. Im not entirely certain how stabbing himself with the tanto brought him back in time, but it is definately an interesting concept. Well done!
Wonderful start so far! I'm eager to see where you take this story. Has great flow. Can't wait to see what happens next! :)
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