The formatting on this fic made it really difficult to read, and some of the spelling and grammar was incorrect. Fixing those up might help make your fic a better read. In addition, writing in the first person is highly difficult, and is usually only used to give readers a sense of empathy and help show where they are coming from, as well as to show the internal, unspoken thoughts that would not be voiced. Writing this in the third person might improve the flow, as well as making your Kagome seem a lot more real, because in a 1st person POV, the main character is expected to have thoughts and opinions, and not including these can make the narrator seem shallow or dull. This is not so much of a problem in 3rd person fics.

The scene where Kagome admitted that she spent last year's Christmas money on herself and then asked for five dollars to go to the dollar store made me laugh, especially as I bought myself a Christmas present this year. Hehe.

I would recommend you find a beta-reader for this fic, as they can really help catch mistakes and improve the flow of your writing. They also mean reviewers leave more nice reviews! Looking forwards to the next chapter!

Your story could use a bit of work, truthfully I can't even get more than a few sentences into it before I have to stop reading and I miss out on what a great story it could be.  The format, everything pushed over to the left, needs to be centered so you're not getting lost when trying to read.  I would really recommend losing the caps, they are really not needed and instead of adding to your story, they take away from it.

If you really need to emphazise a word, try putting it inside ' ' or using italics.  They both get the job done without distracting your readers away from your story.  And I would suggest trying to work in third person, he or she, rather than first, I or me, as first person tends to be a lot harder to write and simply switching to third can make the story easier to follow and more enjoyable.

Good luck with this story and any future ones you may write.

I liked how you wrote Kagome and her mom. Kagome was acting like a real teenager and her mom was adorable funny. However, because of the way the story was formatted it made it a little hard to read. I would also watch out for spelling, grammar, and punctuation mistakes. You have an excellent start here, and with a little TLC it will truely shine!

I like the drabble and I really like how you wrote Kagome.
Though however there were a few problems with run-on sentences and what not, also the format was a bit diffcult to read...a quick example to clean it up slightly could be if you did paragraphs but if wanted a single line for someone else talking.

Though I still liked the story and wish to read more from you so please keep up the good work!

the format was a little difficult to read through, and there were issues with run-ons, grammar, punctuation, and spelling. A beta could really be of help with this. I thought you wrote with good humor, and definately portray Kagome as a typical teen, which is neat to see - sometimes she has the tendancy to be characterized as too mature in my opinion.

Great start I can't wait to see what happens, especially since Inuyasha is there as well as Sesshomaru.  I like the personality you gave her mom.  She was fun and absolutely adorable.  Please update soon.