Hm, nice lil story. ;D

Very good job on your story, everything flows nicely and easy to follow along and enjoy :).  Though you may want to give a few explanations/translations at the bottom for some of the things you used.  For example: I do not reconize the term/name Saigoku-sama so I am not sure what it actually means and am guessing it is important.  Other than that, good job.

This was a very cute one-shot. I would love to see it continued as it was left very open-ended, aka ebil cliffy lol. The only thing I would recommend would be to go in and maybe add a few more details to smooth out the flow of the story, as it seemed to get a little jumpy and confusing toward the end. Other than that very well done, and I'll be looking forward to more of your work in the future!

I agree with Moxy on the points that she made, a suggestion could be wrapping it up and explaining everything in a later oneshot or something like that. Keep up the good work and -two thumbs up-.

There was one continuity issue I noticed. At the beginging of the chapter you make a point of emphasizing Kagome's reluctance to mess with the timeline, but made an exception with the iPod. But by the end of the chapter she's sharing her chemistry book with Sesshomaru... definately doesn't stick with what you had originally been saying, so I was a little confused by that. Did she have a change of heart, and if so, why or what brought it on? I appreciated all of the details at the begining of the chapter, leading up to the main plot of the story. It was entertaining and helpful in setting the stage. I also thought Kagome's frustration with Sesshomaru was classicly done! I got a good chuckle. However, his reply "Go." was a little confusing to me. I would have thought he was saying "Go Away" rather than "Go Ahead." I was also wondering what ever happened with the entire arm thing? Its never fully resolved. This had lots of great bits in it that just sorta ended. I'd like to see this one shot extended into a chapter sotry or even just filled out some to complete those ideas that were never fully conceptualized in the story. Its too good a piece to leave here, I WANT MOOOOORE! lol :) which is TOTALY a good thing. You did wonderfully. 

I liked this one shot a lot.  It could easily become a series of one shots to show the beginning and then progression of a relationship between Kagome and Sesshomaru.  I thought Kagome's reaction to the jewel finally being gone was right on.  After all that she went through with that jewel even the good times it was still an anormous amount of responsibilty for her.  So I can see her laughing and crying. Singing and dancing.  YouI did a great job on this.