LMAO!!! I don't even know where to start!!! But I guess Sess is right, it would be an improvement.
Elisa, this is a good story, but it could be better. I think you were writing too fast, trying to get it from head to computer. You need to watch your verb tenses, you kept switching from past to present. Also, I think you would benefit from reading this aloud before you post it, you can pick up a lot of mistakes that way. But it is a good, albeit very sad, story and I'd love to know what Sesshoumaru did to Kagome's enemies.
"The Girls"?????? LMAO!!! I love it!
Hehehe that is a line from CSI : Crime Scene Investigations between Grisom and Sarah. :D I love that show. <3 I love your drabbles by the way. Hehehe
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