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This was a lovely, but sad poem. The feelings were well presented, and other than the flow feeling a little off, I really enjoyed reading this.

I assume this was freestyle? At first it felt like you may be trying for a quatrain rhyming sceme but then it drastically veers, and there wasnt any particular Dactyl flow. Its helpful to readers to sometimes just have the author point out that its a free style poem, so they dont look for a certain flow. I thought the content of the poem was very moving, and enjoyed reading it!

Very nice poem, though the meter seemed off a bit.  It seemed like it was starting with ABAB, which was sounding really good, but than it changed to no real meter.  It was still good either way, but I like the first four lines the most, they were beautifully written.

Agreed, it flowed very nicely. I like how the poem really related to the title...I have seen it far too many times where the title of the poem makes sense for what is actually writting so I give you kudos for the relation between the title and what's written!

This was very nice.  It flowed very well and was just enough without going overboard on the feelings.  It was also very real, the feelings were tangible and you could feel the heartache Kagome was feeling.  Very nice.