OMG This was awesome please finish i really want to see what happens next

That's really not bad for a 2nd attempt at writing a lemon! :) I like it!

I like it overall, has a few problems with double words in a sentence like with dog with, which should be dog with & I think part of the sentence may be missing there because I'm not sure if it said with what. Also you have bought as in buy something when it should be bout, as in a wrestling bout, etc. Hope this helps a bit.

i really like it. HOT! looking forward to reading more from you. ^-^ 

hello,

this is well done...good job...