Dang, what's Sesshoumaru's problem? Update soon! Nice lemon by the way ;)

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Poor Kagome. I wonder what the hell happened? Sex scene was HOT though!!!! xD

It's sad. I found it to be well writen. A short little one-shot. Harsh view on Sesshoumaru. Kagome seems a little weak in my opinion.

Noticed a slight problem.  This story is posted under 'Chapter stories' and each chapter in them, as mentioned in Dokuga rules, have to be at least 700 words.  This is not.  You're not too far off though so adding another paragraph or two should put you over the min. 

For the story itself, very interesting beginning and I would love to see where you take it.  Most stories start out before they even get together and you have it starting at the end of their relationship, so it's a nice twist. The angst and details were very well written and does a great job of drawing the readers in.  I can not wait to see more.

You have a very good start here, just enought of a teaser to hook a reader and bring them back for more. It is also very well written, perhaps very slightly rushed, but well done none-the-less. However Dokuga requires that all chapter stories have at least 700 words per chapter, and yours falls a little short. I would hate for a story with so much potential to be removed for such a minior technicality. I enjoyed the read and will look foreward to more of your work in the future.

This is very sad...but I think that perhaps you are going too fast here. There is no need to rush in stories. I think you need to remember that it isn't a race. Take the time to flesh out your characters and your plot. If you start off so fast, you don't leave yourself with a lot of places to go. You are starting off with a lot of angst, but you should remember that there is a lot of information there that should be given...How did they meet? Why did things go so wrong? Why is she having second thoughts? Try to take the time to tell the story fully. Outline your story and then really get into the detail work. This will help you to paint the picture for your reader. Good luck!

Wow, what a beginning! Kagome's pain and Sess's void, disregard of everything, especially her. You've written a very emotional warping prologue to what I hope will be an extremely dramatic story. You have many questions to answer, the most important for me, is why does he loath her? Keep up the good work, I'll be reading...

great beginning! I can't wait to see what you will come up with.