oh this is good!!!!!

This was an interesting idea, however I feel it could use a little TLC. You have an interesting start here, but everything feels very rushed. I would recommend asking for the help of a beta, they could help you to turn this into a great story, and help catch some of the grammar errors I noticed. This is a good start, and with a little TLC This will be a very interesting and unique story. Keep up the good work!

Well I like that you tried to go a different route, however, I think it was a bit too much of a jump into OOC.  I can not imagine Kagome ever calling Inuyasha a hanyou, nor Sango saying 'you really do look like shit'.  And really there's a difference between her being a strong, impowering and even frisky woman to being well, pretty much a working girl.  I kinda felt like you took misconseptions about women who like sex and put them all together. 

Perhaps if you slowed down a bit and added some more details, explain why she is like this or even have a flashback to the night before she was talking about, it might help show that things aren't as bad as they may come off as.

I really like this and I agree with Moxy I am glad that you didn't write Kagome as her normal school-girl self though I am really curious as how you are going to continue on this plotline. I wish to read more of this...keep up the good work!

I have to applaud you for being brave enough to jump into very OOC representation of Kagome, and offering up an original plotline. I think it can come off as a little underdeveloped however, if you don't offer more insight into those personality changes. If you are going to jump right in to her being a completely different person, then I advise you give the readers some insight into that change from the very start as well. If you take more time evolving her character change, then you can take time in letting the readers explore why those changes are occuring. OOC is NOT a bad thing in my opinion, but one had really ought to try and explain those difference and changes either through circumstances, or example. Also, I think it would be beneficial to you if you requested a beta to help you conceptualize your idea for the development of the story, in a way that translates more clearly to the readers. It is never a bad idea to have an extra set of eyes on grammar, spelling, and structure as well! You've got a wonderfully original start here, and I hope to see more from you.

This was a very nice beginning.  I like the different plot twist.  Usually we always see Kagome as the shy good girl, which there is nothing wrong with, that has no problems with the customs of the fuedal era even though they are so different than the time she grew up in.  I am very curious to see where you go with this. Great job. Please update soon.