The story starts well, however the ending is disappointing. His own actions make his references to Inuyasha as dishonorable hypocritacal. He proves himself both dishonorable & a hypocrite. I hope you add to the story. Kagome deserves her freedom & happiness.
i'd tell sessho to go fuck himself.
kagome shouldn't be reacting like she is to him and his words. she should be pissed, she should lash out. she is a modern woman and doesn't bow to anyone.
jaken and sessho think that inu yasha was dishonorable for his actions, but what does that make sessho? an arrogant dog who would so readily abuse her simply because she is herself.
anyways, it's a good start, please update soon
Wow! More please!
are there any more chapters coming out for this story it is truly exciting
eyeeaaahhh..... You lost me with the ending. Extreme dislike. She turned into some simperring lackey in two seconds, with no pretense. She became worthless to me in that second, but i have an extreme dislike for grand showings of weakness. *shrugz*
--Kaminoko (c)2011
Kim (Chapter 1) - Sat 01 May 2010
in the first chapter at the bottom kagome is spelled wrong.
Stockholm syndrome? An enchantment placed by Sesshy on anyone he wants to keep near? Or just a very magnetic personality? I love Kagome's emoting in this chapter...
Hesunohana (Chapter 4) - Fri 30 Apr 2010
what exactly is happening . I wonder...
and why does Sesshoumaru want Kagome ? power or anything else ?
Kimiko Doll (Chapter 4) - Fri 30 Apr 2010
NNNNNNNOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! KAGOME DON'T GIVE IN! now i'm fed up withthis story. kagome has lost her mind. T___T those beatings went to her head.
I love the twist in this chapter. Nicely done. Wow, Jaken has a heart after all. Oh well, it sucks to be Inuyasha right now. Though it was harsh, it was true. The only thing I feel bad about is the deaths of Sango and Miroku. Don't get me wrong, I'm not anti-Inuyasha. I'm anti-Inu/Kik cliche. Love it.
I like your writing style but truthfully I dislike the story. You made Kagome weak. After one day and a horribe beating you have her already bowing to Sesshomaru and pledging her allegiance to him? Where is her loyalty? Where is her strength? This is not the Kagome I know from the story carried over into a new story.
Three great chapters! Awesome! Can't wait for more!
Hesunohana (Chapter 3) - Wed 28 Apr 2010
oh gosh ! oh gosh ! oh gosh !!!
such a terrible beginning. I'm so eager to read the next chapters.
bravo !
What I meant to say was that I hope the ghosts of Inuyasha, Sango and Mirokucome back to haunt Sesshomaru and bring comfort to Kagome at a certain point. Great job!
Very interesting beginning ! I can't wait to see what you're going to do with it ;)
Wonderfully descript writing. I could picture everything, and the way you portrayed Kagome's suffering was exceptionally vivid. This story is going to be awesome...
Powerful, vivid writing style! I'm gonna love this, I can tell...
fatcatmom (Chapter 2) - Fri 09 Apr 2010
Wow! Riveting story, well written. What could the demon lord have in mind for Kagome? Does he feel the same tingle in his core when he looks at her that Kagome does in hers? Please update soon!
Oooh! All I have to say is this. I hope Kagome gives that damn toad his just rewards by killing him and shoving his staff up his ass for the fun of it, just as he killed Inuyasha, that little weakling. The only reason why that damn imp was able to kill him was that Sesshomaru did all the work. But did Sango and Miroku have to die with him? Another thing, their ghosts should come back to haunt him and that little kiss-ass. Kagome deserves that much revenge. Hmm, dark, kinky...I LIKE IT!!!!!! Can't wait for more.
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