This was an interesting story, but things seemed a little jumbled and hard to follow at times. I would go back through and do a thorough check over for grammatical errors as those were the things I noticed the most that hindered your story.

Also you need to put in a disclaimer about not owning Sailor Moon in every chapter since this is a crossover. There is a blanket disclaimer on the site for Inuyasha, but any other works need to be credited to their rightful owners.

You have the beginnings of an excellent story here, and I will be looking forward to more of this story in the near future!

Well that was interesting, I was not expecting to find Sailor Moon in that, not that that's a bad thing, but I would suggest some warning that it's a crossover.  That said I believe this story has a lot of potental to become something really unique and worth reading, but it needs a bit of work.  First and foremost, try to slow down a bit.  Things seemed rather rushed to me and it disrupted the flow of your story.

When changing scenes/povs, try to write the change into the story itself rather than putting the person's name before hand, it tends to draw the reader's eyes away from the story.  And try to stay away from words in all caps, it tends to have the same effect.  If you feel you must emphaze the word, use italics or enclose the word within ' '.  It will have the same effect, but tends to distract the reader less.

Good luck with the story and I can not wait to see where you take it next.

I have enjoyed this. And I thought I wouldn't because of the twist... please update soon. :]

Oh, no.  Sesshomaru has given up on Kagome?  He's not going to even follow up by checking around for her scent?  So sad!  But I like the characterization of him.  I think it's very "in character".  Sesshy is always the "kind of denial" in the anime and manga.  I can't wait for them to be together! 

I find myself suspecting the little child asking Kagome for help healing his sister might be up to no good!  I thought the scene where Kagome is ripped from Sesshomaru's arms at the side of the well was very touching and well-written. 

Beware of the evil barbarism:  The contraction for "they are" is is not their. 

I remain impressed by your creativity.  Keep up the excellent work!

A Sailor Moon crossover?  Kind of?  I didn't see that coming!  I don't know if that is my thing, but you have my attention, and my admiration, too.  Because you have a great imagination, and I think you did an excellent job bringing the two worlds together.  One comment:  Chocolate coated eyes?  That's vivid imagery, very unique.  I have a feeling you are going to keep me on my toes as a reader!

I feel compelled to comment on your story summary.  Coming up with an effective summary is not an easy task.  The summary for this story is excellent!  I haven't begun to dig into the story yet, but if the story lives up to the summary you have written, it will be great!

I agree with the others, it was a very nice start to the story and I want to read more.
Moxy is right concerning the story format putting the words/breaks in bold allows the reader to know what they are actually reading and it well at least it keeps me from getting confused lol. I hope you keep up the good work!!!

good start, and an interesting concept. I hope to read more soon! I also appreciate your format (although its a preference thing) the bold outiling when the begin and end of flashbacks are, and the italics of the flashbacks. It makes it easier to keep track, because there really are so many of them. Keep it up!

This was a very nice start.  The story has a very interesting twist.  I wonder how Kagome will be able to do both jobs her first job as the shikon miko and the second as a sailor scout.  It will also be interesting how you fit in the time frame and Sesshomaru.  Keep up the good work.