The first chapter of this story was really well done, but the second two chapters I feel fell short of your potential.For example the large flashback bars are distracting in a story ,and quite frankly Ch 1: The Battle PT 1 could have done without them because the whole chapter was a flashback. I would have put an intro line about someone remembering that bit of the battle instead in that instance to lead off the chapter, then maybe italicized all the bits that pertained to the flashback. You have to potential and the talent to make this into an exceptional story and with a little TLC this story will shine for all its worth. Keep up the good work!

I really liked the first chapter of this story, it flowed rather well, the details were well thought out and written but the later two chapters seemed far too rushed and almost as if written by a different person.  Things like using all caps, too big of a scene changer for flashbacks and the constent dialog with little to no detail really takes away from your story.  I think that with a bit of work you could have a really decent story started, but I feel you should go back over these chapters and slow down a bit.  Flesh out more of the story and write more like you did in the first chapter.

Moxy is right be really careful about how or what you use in your Author's Note or you will get smacked with the mod/admin baton lol. Other than that I really love the story line, you have some many potential directions to take this story that it leaves me waiting to read more!  I also agree that the story format could use a little re-working and if so it would make the story flow better for others to read. Good job on the story so far, keep up the work!

Warning: Its against site rules to use any type of Authors notes for none story related purposes. Be careful of doing it, or you might get the mod/admin baton wagged at you! I really enjoy the you are doing an amnesia story... there are so many opportunitis for plot twists, and it will be interesting to see where you take it! Double check grammar and spelling, and maybe rework the formatting. In my opinion the format is a little hard to follow. It could just be me though!

Wow, this is the beginning of a wonderful and exciting story.  I can't wait to see what happens next.  That was very clever of Naraku to show Kagome how Inuyasha would let her down if it was between her and Kikyou.  I wonder what exactly he did to her with that burn on the back of her neck.  Does this mean she will always hear Naraku's voice? I hope you update soon. ^_^