Alright. Let's do this.
First of all, I never watched the Avatar Air Bender thingy. I've heard of it, but I've never watched it, so this is all new and surprise for me! The first paragraph of the story just sucked me right now. I felt like I was reading... a Lord of the Rings first paragraph type thing. Also, I'm guessing that's a hint of things to come, and OHMYGOD LADY. Do I want! A nice refreshing not over done story, yes. Now I know why you're so smart, ahah.
I love your characteriastion of everyone, including the way they talk. Often it feels like everyone is OOC, but not there. I felt like I was watching the actual show, and they were talking. Oh Miroku, I love that you did not lessen his perverted side. That trick they pulled on him was freaking hilarious. I also want to beat the shit out of Inuyasha, which is a usual feeling in me, so you're spot on ahah.
I was so intrigued by the moving shard, and frankly I didn't even think it was linked to Kagome's destiny. /face palms/ I'm such a dummy sometimes. Alright, see, cause I'm dumb and stuff, I was thinking... Kagome was like... a child or something of the person. Turns out, Her momma was the woman leaving, WHICH TOTALL EXPLAINS WHERE THE HECK KAGOME'S DAD IS. That's brilliant my dear. And sad too for Kagome's mother. I wonder what her explanation is gonna be though when Kagome asks... WHY IN THE WORLD didn't you tell me ahah. I also like the whole she'll travel through the well to where she is needed, but is kept in a safe place. That was neato. Everything intertwins so well!
One of these days, a sit is gonna kill Inuyasha ahah.
That training you put Kagome through... anger issue? Ahah. Poor girl. I would have done the first five minutes and I would have come crashing down. That was awesome. I mean, it makes sense that she needs to be a little stronger, especially since ya need to kick Inuyasha. (Ahah, I just want him buried in the ground for a few days, that's all). I'm going to like this strong, powerful Kagome I can already tell. Thank you for not making her scream OMG. SAVE ME SOMEBODY. That ain't Kagome.
HOLY CRAP DID I LAUGH HARD WHEN INUYASHA PISSED HER OFF. Little puppy stuck in a glass prison ahaha. Lord knows I wish I could do that to him sometimes. Kagome too, but it was the first time she could actually do it. She's going to be a dangerous gal when all those powers are unsealed ahah. I wouldn't mess with her. I also like that she has to unlock all of her powers and whatnot with different trainings. Very interesting.
Inuyasha is such a party pooper, doesn't want Kagome to be strong pft. He just wants her to need him all the time. Now now, I wonder how Sesshy is going to feel about them walking upon his lands ahah. I'm also very intrigued as of who her other masters are going to be. Hmmm, so many possibilities!
Well, I'm at least glad Sesshomaru is coming along, because I have a feeling you're going to write him wonderfully.
NOW, to my favorite part. YOU TEASING NAUGHTY WOMAN. You don't give people a lemon like that and then MAKE IT A DREAM. AND MAKE IT STOP. You can't do that. YOU CAN'T DO THAT WOMAN! ~~~ Lol. I hate you. No, but god, you got me all worked up. That was hot. And of course I'M PRETTY SURE I KNEW WHO IT WAS, ahah. But it was awesome nonetheless. I liked her reactions and thoughts it was different. Ahah, Kagome naughty naughty girl! Wait until she actually gets the real thing.
Ohmygod, when Inuyasha had his nose in her crotch... SO FUCKING PRICELESS.
You're writing interested me humors me, and it's amazing.
Now I bet you know what's coming.
Where.
The.
Fuck.
Is.
The.
Update.
ily.
You've been holding out on me, you awesome author, you! Sheesh! Lol, well I decided to read the first chapter because I couldn't sleep and i lurbed it! Will read the rest tomorrow!
Favorite lines:
“Not true, my grumpy friend. I merely wish to ease this ache in my back. If the Kami's should happen to bless us with such a magnificent view, it is by their will, not mine.” Miroku replied defensively.
“Yeah right. Go ahead and go if you want. It's your funeral.” Inuyasha told him, jumping into a tree to rest.
“You're sure you don't want to join me?” Miroku drawled.
“Not on you're life, monk. I've been sat enough today.”
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Awesome chapter, cant wait to read the next one, keep it up!!!
me (Chapter 2) - Mon 13 Sep 2010
didn't read it all yet but made it halfway through before my time here ran out cuz i was multitaskin lookin for a job, but i loved it so far and couldn't NOT leave a review for you sisser especially since u finally updated it!!!! will leave a better review when i finish the chapters :)
wow you had me totally thinking Sessho jumped the gun, even though I'm fairly certain he doesn't like her yet lol. ANd srsly, waking up to Inuyasha smeeling your crotch would be the worst wake up call ever!! LOL that was great!
o0o0o0o0o0o0oh Yusha's an idiot >:[ I would've kept him in the box until the end of eternity... stipid puppy. Also I can't help but wonder what's going on with the rest of Japan since they spent so much time there, surely her family has to be worried, and I'm betting Naraku didn't just sit around. I am liking the idea so far though and i can't wait to see what happens next! I hope you update soon!!!
As soon as you said elements I had the feeling that Avatar would play a part in this lol. It's a good plot and I think you're doing a great job on it, keep it up!
me (Chapter 1) - Sat 13 Mar 2010
That was a great twist!! Even though i kind of knew that's what was going to happen with this story, but i wasn't positive you decided to do that for sure. I loved it! Well, everything besides the cliffy lol. Keep up the good work! Love ya sis!
I hate you and your cliffy's! Why do you do this to us? Arg, update soon please!
This is a promising start to what I'm sure will be a great story. I'm already looking forward to the next chapter.
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