I'm really intrigued by this idea and so far I really like it the portrayals are done well and the characterizations are believable and interesting. It intrigues me as to where you will go in this story. My one tiny criticism is that you seem to switch tenses frequently, but that can be worked out and a good beta will catch that. Otherwise i thoroughly enjoyed and look forward to seeing where this will go.
--ducky here!!
Wow. I really like the premise of the fic! This one has so much promise! Anglo-sama, you really have a knack for describing characters. I could practically see the Inu-no-Taishou’s eyes flash with worry.
But I really do have to say this: there were a lot of spelling and grammar mistakes. Let me beta it, okay?! ^__^
Okay – so I love how Sesshoumaru is gonna be the one with the jewel inside of him. Are you gonna keep the personalities the same or are you gonna make Kagome all scary and Sessh all bubbly? Is Sesshoumaru going to be weak or strong?? So many questions, so little time!! Keep up the great work!
Ducky out,
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