Excellent writing! Battle scenes are hard, and you made it so I could picture everything that happened.
jane (Chapter 2) - Fri 05 Mar 2010
ah! its really getting good. whats going to happen next? i hope sesshoumaru and kagome can finally be together. keep up the good work :)
Very interesting! I've been sad over a lack of new chapter stories that have caught my attention, but this one seems to have done it. I hope you keep it up!
Anonymous (Chapter 1) - Thu 04 Mar 2010
i love your story! its so detailed and i feel like the relationship between kagome and sesshoumaru is just blossoming beautifully. can't wait for the next chapter!
Excellent!
First I loved your level of description in this and the insights into the characters. Using music to bring Sesshoumaru and Kagome together was a clever plot device. I love the idea of them quietly becoming closer through sharing bathing and other interests. That slow steady building of a rapport between them made the first kiss and other encounters much more meaningful. When you had him rescue her at the end of the chapter it was a perfect ending to a nice gradual and very smoldering buildup.
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