I don't say this very often, but that was perfect exactly as is. The flow, the structure, the plot, everything just perfect. Throughout the whole thing I kept going back and forth thinking it was Sesshoumaru, then Inuyasha, then back again. I couldn't quite figure things out and I loved that. I usually can figure out the main points of a story rather quickly, but for once, you kept me guessing. And I thank you for that :).
I really hope you do a sequel to this story as I am sure it will be just as great as this one. And I hope to read more from you in the future.
Very good. I like your writing style, and I must say I was thinking the same thing as I was reading this. I am glad though that he is alright pre say. I tend to like darker style fics more than the bright and happy ones...sometimes. I would like to proudly state that you have filled my need for a darker fic today!
Ja Ne
This was a heart breaking story, and I enjoyed the angst. Although Sesshomaru was pretty OOC, he turned it around at the end, which was a nice twist to the plot. This is a great one shot, but has TONS of potential for a chapter story.
Ikaru (Chapter 1) - Mon 20 Sep 2010
This was excellently done. I was very disappointed that there wasn't more to read actually...this would make an excellent beginning to a series of oneshots, or even a chapter story. I very much enjoyed this and will look foreward to more of your work in the future!
I like how you ended the story. I agree that even if he had grown up human Sesshomaru is not the kind to just give up and die. Even if you didn't mean for him to live I thought it was great. You should turn this into a chapter story adding more backstory and I would love to see what he has planned to get her back. Great job.
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