Reviews for Cluster by Twilight Dawn

I Love The Stuff I Review (Chapter 5) - Wed 07 Aug 2013

WHAT HAPPENS?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!


Angelika (Chapter 5) - Tue 22 Nov 2011

hmn msot of these were really good one-shot but you coudl take the one were they were dating and broke up and turn it into a whole new story.

over all thi was awesome tho.


swiftdeath (Chapter 4) - Sun 17 Oct 2010

hahahahahahahhhaaaaaaaaahahahah! that was so funny!


flitterbugzz (Chapter 2) - Wed 13 Oct 2010

i like your writing but something that kept geting to me was how you made sesshoumaru so dominant. i mean i know hes all bad ass alpha and all but kagomes always had this strong fighting spirit and i think you should of wrote a little more into that. her fiery and fiesty attitude was always something i thought would of helped in the attraction between them, but you made it were she was his little bitch and did everything he wanted no questions asked-in most the chapters. it didnt seem like kagome to me. but i guess over all it was really good, just think kagome needs a lil more kick ass in her


Tsuki (Chapter 4) - Tue 12 Oct 2010

Haha that was funny!!! :D I really loved all of them! I think you write really well :D


Patricia (Chapter 3) - Mon 21 Jun 2010

i love these storys!! i hope theres more to come!


Rowdys girl (Chapter 3) - Mon 21 Jun 2010

I think these are very nice stories, very entertaining.


Tsuki (Chapter 3) - Mon 21 Jun 2010

This is some awesome stuff so far :) I love your writing style, it's amazing!! I'm totally hooked now :D :D :D W00T!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :D


Sandy (Chapter 2) - Mon 14 Dec 2009

I almost want to say continue this but on the other hand i dont.....but it was good.


Crazy_Crayons (Chapter 2) - Mon 14 Dec 2009

ok so Naraku is sesshomaru's rival but in the 1st chapter sesshomaru gives Naraku a ride to school..?

Then sesshomaru dumps kagome and tell's others to pick on her but yet he's still hung up on her? He's the one who made the choice to break up....

She gets picked on my sesshomaru's people but once he saves her it all ok and everythings just peachy?

 


Teana (Chapter 2) - Mon 14 Dec 2009

The first chapter was cute, well writen and a basic little dripple. I loved it.

While I found the base story line in the second to be an excellent idea, the follow through was ok at best. It moves way to fast with no middle story, Kagome goes from poor abused ex. to forgiving girlfriend with an unrealistic event that although could have been the perfect it was missing a personal element. Why was Sesshoumaru coming for her? How is Sesshoumaru been since the break up? I think if you were to break this chapter up into say almost 3 chapters highlighting 1. the break up and abuse of Kagome 2.Sesshoumaru after the break up and being the leader of the abuse and 3. Naraku and the rescue.

I found you writing to be excellent and the form of which you wrote to be great. And I don't know if this was suppose to be dripple or something more. If it was just a dripple great! If you want it to be more, this is just my opinion.

~Teana~


molly (Chapter 1) - Mon 07 Dec 2009

wow love this story, its so cool and amazingly brilliant and are you going to do

another chapter coz if u are when will it be out lol


Kristina Kimball (Chapter 1) - Sat 05 Dec 2009

nice story.  It was well done.  good job...


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