Oh I crazy like this story!! I mean actually, kick-ass!! If this is really based partially off of a book you've read, I might have to look into reading it. Wicked-awesome!!! So can't wait for you to update.
And no, that was a good fight scene. Sometimes people have a tendence to try and cram as much information as they can in and ruin the flow, but you did a splended job. Definately can NOT wait to see how this story proceeds.
Until the update. Toodles.
Arena_of Twilight (Chapter 2) - Sat 24 May 2008
Im not really familiar with the stories that you mentioned in the beginning, but I do love the plot. Everything is detailed in way that it leaves you clinging to every word. Extremely talented!!! please update soon!!!
(Chapter 2) - Sat 24 May 2008
Oooooh, this story is delicious! I hope you plan to update often. I'm addicted. There are no critiques. It is well organized and I think it has the right amount of detail. I can easily picture everything as I read the story. I haven't heard of any of the stories you mentioned.
Aimee (Chapter 2) - Sat 24 May 2008
This is really good, I don't know what it's based on, the storys listed at the begining didn't ring any bells for me, but it's great just the same, see ya next chapter =)
I think it is a really great start and I can't wait to see more!!
I thought I recognized the plot!
It's a favorite of mine, and I thing you are off to a great start!
Keep up the lovely work!
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