awwwwwwwwwwwwww :')!!!!!!!!! crying but heartfelt. a lovely end to the chapter but i have a feeling there's more. please update!
Brilliant! Absolutely brilliant! I knew you could do it. You need to keep writing now, you certainly have the talent, you just need to polish your skills. There were a few things, I would have had more, but the power went out and I lost it all and I'm too tired to go back to find everything. Lazy me.
Punctuation, commas, periods, question marks, etc., should at the end of the sentences that are enclosed in quotes. And the punctuation goes inside the quotes.
Recounting his memories of journeys past,
When I fell asleep it was almost sunset
“Rise and shine, sleepyhead,” she Sleephead is one word.
and deal with it,” his head was buried so low at the end,
I almost killed her, Kagome,” he dropped Commas are your friends.
rage that you just don’t care,” she was angry
she could call me her ojiki,” he placated
Wait, I’m confused,” she
I guess you were too out
notice it earlier, but Kohaku’s
It was Miroku, ever the diplomat, who Commas enclose parenthetical phrases.
The place at the head of the table sat empty,
It was a really good story and I knew that romance would bloom somehow!
Lina (Chapter 6) - Mon 14 Dec 2009
Beautiful story you have here. I really liked how Inuyasha finaly ended up growing up and Sesshoumaru realizing he did have a heart. Thanks for sharing and keep up the good work! ^_^
autumngold (Chapter 6) - Sun 13 Dec 2009
What an absolutely incredible story! I love that Kagome and Sesshoumaru were honest with each other, and I love that Sesshoumaru told Kagome of his feelings towards her. Is there going to be a sequel? I know you said you were going to continue writing, I just hope you mean you are going to add to this story.
I can't wait to see Part 2! I shall be waiting with baited breath!
This is a rather cute take on 'finding Sesshoumaru injured'. I'll be reading! Sesshoumaru's instant love realization seemed a little out of character- but he's not one to really lie to himself, so I can see it happening. Now how he goes about expressing that love should be interesting. ;p Expressing anything other than annoyance isn't really a strong suit for him. And I read on babynames.com that Rin means friend or companion in Japanese- it's a unisex name (I considered it for my babe-to-be). I really like how you have Kagome portrayed in this- it matches with my imagined version of an older, more mature Kags. I look forward to your next installment.
Thank you for sharing,
BWise
names (Chapter 5) - Tue 01 Dec 2009
Rin means companion.
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