What a nice story! Perhaps you can continue this storyline. I would like to read more of this story. It is very good.

I like this, it's very sweet and a very good story, not at all like Forthright's. But with one theme for everyone to use, it would be hard not to have similar inspiration. However,there were a number of errors, like aspirations instead of apparations; stone hinge should be Stonehenge.

“How is it that still haven’t even bumped into. I think it would make more sense if it was: How is it that we still haven't even bumped into Sesshoumaru?

“The worst part is that I can’t tell their dead till the float, walk through something or disappear. “The worst part is that I can’t tell they're dead till they float, walk through something or disappear.

*Or maybe their dead.* *Or maybe they're dead.*

Besides want a closer look at whatever that is. *  Besides wanting a closer look at whatever that is.* I noticed that you often have a space between the thought and the *. If you're going to use these to enclose thoughts, then they should probably be treated like single and double quotation marks and come right at the end of the thought. It will lessen confusion.

A large pack of wolves were heading her way. A large pack of wolves was heading her way. Pack is the subject of the sentence and is singular, therefore, was is the appropriate verb. If you had written it: Wolves were heading her way. The wolves would be the subject and the plural form of the verb would be correct.

I hope this helps you a bit. I know that this probably qualifies me as a  grammar/spelling nazi, but I'm really just anal retentive and I think you're worth the time. Besides, I've read your works before and I have the impression that you really dashed this out to make the deadline and didn't give it a serious read-over.

Jane

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I really like this.  Did have at least 1 goof though, it's apparitions (ghosts) not aspirations (strong desire, longing, or aim; ambition), it's in 1 of the 1st 5 paragraphs.

I really like this story!  Kagome was so sweet, looking for Sesshoumaru so he could talk to his father.  I think it was interesting that Inu no Tasihou didn't want to talk to Inuyasha.  I'm glad that he wanted to see Sesshoumaru.  Especially after their last meeting, it was good they could clear the air.  Thank you for ths story!