This story was amazing and I enjoyed it.
How God Created Mother
God took the fragrance of a flower, The majesty of a tree, The gentleness of a morning a dew The calm of a quiet sea, The beauty of a twilight hour The soul of a starry night The laughter of the rippling brook, The grace of a bird in flight, Then God fashioned from these things A creation like no other, And when His masterpiece was through, He called it simply...MOTHER.
Happy Mother's Day!
I found this story when i went to your profile after reading A Real Good Man(which is an amzaing story btw). I just want to say you are an amzingly talented writer. Please keep the stories coming. My day was spent reading your stories lol.
I like your stories a great deal. You show real potential as a writer.
However, your typos and/or spelling errors, doubled up words are a distraction - sometimes I cannot figure out what you intended to say.
In telling you that, I think this story - Forever Was a Lie - was the worst of them, you do seem to have gotten better, for I don't see as many issues in A Real Good Man.
You should considered finding a beta reader. I'm sure you can find someone on this site who is willing to preread for you. I am willing to do so myself, so just consider it.
I look forward to more of your stories,
Good luck!
Great story, I am a sucker for a happy ending.
beautiful
it's truely beautiful
Loryn K. (Chapter 26) - Sat 17 Oct 2009
Aw, this was a lovely story. I didn't check to see if you completed it but kudos! There are allot of spelling ang grammatical errors but a couple of proof reads should clear that up! Good luck on this story and any future stories you have!
Ameire (Chapter 26) - Fri 16 Oct 2009
I Really liked this! Good job. I'm a little on the vengeful side- I personally can't wait un til Naraku gets out of that prison. Just so I can imagine what then inuyasha, inupapa, and Sesshoumaru do to him. Heh heh heh . Oh, and let's not forget Kagome's father MAmoru, was it?
Rei (Chapter 2) - Wed 14 Oct 2009
Sounds interesting so far, I hope she kicks his ass. Or blows him off when he attempts to fulfill the bet. Heh heh heh , he deserves to fall in love with his intended target.
I love your story. But I get the feeling Ive read something like this before, is this posted on another site? Anyway, I hope you update soon.
Nice beginning, I can't wait to see what you have in store for us. I look forward to the next chapter :)
Poor Kagome- it looks like there is a lot of heartbreak ahead for her. On the upside, I LOVE stories where Sesshie breaks Kagome's heart. Go For It!
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