This was an interesting story so far, the first chapter is pretty confusing and could use a little more details in the subplots to make it flow better, the other two chapters improved greatly in that respect. Your style of writing makes it easy to invision the scenario and Kagome's personality twist was a pleasant surprise. All in all, well done so far.

The fic does have an interesting plot line, but I found the constant changes of setting made it kind of hard to follow, and I think it starts off too cryptic. I have no idea what's going on anymore, to be honest. However, you have a very nice style of writing. The sentences flow well, and you describe things in a way that makes it easy to picture. Adding in a bit of backstory or something readers can use for reference might help make it a bit easier to follow!

Intersting beginning, the story seems to be flowing rather well, espeically since there are so many sub plots going on, but I would try and draw some of the scenes out a bit more.  It seems like there is more to them to me and think it would help the story to flow a bit better if you work on them a bit more.

Either way, interesting start and hope you continue this.

Wow, o.k. now you did it by admitting you already had chapters 3, and 4 already done.  Post, post, post.  Very interesting.  I can't wait to see what hasppens next.  Is Sesshomaru a hit man? I wonder.

I am so darn confused. There are a lot of "he's" and "she's" not relating to inuyasha, kagome, or sesshomaru in chapter two that left me very confused. you did explain what was going on really. all i know is that sesshomaru killed some people and that now some people are after him. no reasons for anything. chapter one as just as confusing as the timeline was wonky. LOVED the scene where kagome wacks that guy good with a bottle. I hate weakling kagome, but love fierce kagome!