i liked it alot but it seems unfinished or is it she neer makes it

I enjoy the story but I felt like there is more to continue it. Will Sesshoumaru find a way to save Kagome? Will she escape and make it?

What an interesting setup you have.

I think the story was very nice, very easy to relate to - being caught in a cage, enslaved by someone else's misery, forced to do things you don't want. I really appreciated reading that, but I think you should take a little more time to look over your chapters before you put them up, I noticed a few spelling errors, and a lot of punctuation: nothing a good beta can't fix for you.

Also, under the terms that it was a longer lengthened fic, I would suggest using more description (and fewer capitals). For example, just explain to us how she got into the situation, how Rin got into the situation, what happened to her parents, what her life is like now that she's imprisoned in comparison to what it was it was like before - what her relationship to Sesshoumaru is, is another good one.

It was good, though. Thank you for the read!

~ Incomprehensible

What an interesting AU you've set up! I like the feeling of the universe you've created. You do have a couple grammatical issues ('chilled' for 'child', etc.), but they can easily be fixed just by a good read-through or by getting a beta. Sometimes the best way to edit is by reading things aloud (you'll find more errors that way). If you're looking for a beta, you can always post in the forums.

But the story itself is off to a very good start. I'm intrigued by the relationship between Sesshoumaru and Kagome, and I love the way you've included Rin into the storyline. 

Excellent work. :)

I liked this very much, it was interesting, there were some grammatical mistakes and it flowed a little rough at times, but all easily fixed by a beta or a read through. Great job.