hey there! i just want to say that the beginning was really gripping and i hope to read more! It was a nice change to read the story from sesshoumaru's pov regarding his feelings and such instead of kagome's (not that i dont like that). There was one instance of word choice and that was with the word 'disillusioned.' I thought you meant 'delusional' in that context to suggest that sesshoumaru was crazy for even thinking that Kagome should act like a dog. Disillusioned means disappointed, and i didnt get that feeling from the text (unless i'm misinterpreting it...)
Other than that, if it's not a oneshot, i can't wait for the next chappie!! <3
ducky out.
Is/was she a willing mate?
Jess (Chapter 1) - Fri 01 Jan 2010
This is some good stuff here :) I really, really think you should update :)
I like your writing style! *Hands you a cookie* :D
i know this was only a test of sorts, but i really like what you have done so far. I like how you represent Sesshoumaru's mind-frame and the fact that the characters don't fall in love after one chapter.lol.but its a really good start ^.~
This is really good, how'd she end up with him anyway? Can't wait for more!
| I think that you did a good job on this. I was expecting her station to be that of a slave or something, but that she is his mate was very interesting. Is this going to remain a one-chapter or do you have other chapters planned? It is a very good concept.
| I am intrigued... please write more.
| Okay, I really like how this started. I think that writing how they lead to be "mates" would would be a really interesting story. Why is she so against it? Or is she just toying with him? The fact that our Lord Sesshoumaru doesn't like humans, let alone human females, begs the question, "why her?."
Food for thought.
| Write more! Please?
Saholia (Chapter 1) - Sun 13 Sep 2009
| I know you wrote this was a test...but it's very interesting--please continue it! :)
Lilith (Chapter 1) - Sun 13 Sep 2009
| ^-^ i like dis! Will you please continue it? It seems like the fic would be AMAZING! ;)
miwa03 (Chapter 1) - Sun 13 Sep 2009
| I love the first chapter! Continue please!
| i hope you continue this i know you only intended to make this as a test but it just seems too good to end now...you can go so far with this, show into the past as to how sesshomaru got kagome there anyway and what happened to inuyasha and the others that she had to go with him...please reconsider this is just too good
Continue (Chapter 1) - Sun 13 Sep 2009
| I like it, please continue.
loveless (Chapter 1) - Sun 13 Sep 2009
| I like this but why is Kagome Sesshomaru's mate if she doesn't want to be? Did he force her. If so why. This is frustrating. Please update soon.
| yay! please continue
Fairqueen (Chapter 1) - Sat 12 Sep 2009
| oh come on finish this, please don't make this a one shot. it started so good and how did she get there. some background and more story development would be wonderful :)
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