I don't blame Kagome for not wanting to go back to Inuyasha. I wouldn't want to leave Sesshoumaru either. Thank you for continuing your story. Can't wait for more!
Hey there! I just wanted to let you know that I think you're doing a very good job with this story! I didn't catch any spelling or grammar mistakes, and the words you use fit the characters very well. I also like how you portray Sesshomaru and Kagome, and also Rin and Jaken. The on;y thing I would suggest that you consider are longer chapters with a little more feeling in them. Not the kind of feeling like emotion, although that would round your characters out a bit more, but the kind of feeling that comes with sight and smell and the other senses. There seems to be something missing in the thoughts of Kagome and the situations she gets into (like there's an abrupt ending to the battles and abrupt changes in her attitude), but if you would elongate the battles and make her train of thought a little longer, it would help to fill in some of the blank spaces I'm seeing. Anyway, sorry for the extremely long rambing message, but I'm enjoying the story so far and I'll be looking out for the next chapter! Good luck! ~Lexi
Another great story. I hope you add some more chapters to it. Kagome and Sesshomaru are completely in character. I adore it! There are so many possibilites with this story too. Good luck!
| >.< I love it! Keeep it up. intersting attack. And poor kagome on her own, but at least she was abloe to do something.
| Wow. That was so cool! Please update. I want to read more.
autumngold (Chapter 5) - Fri 18 Sep 2009
| Ouch, hard lesson. Not that Kagome didn't need it, but way to make her feel worthless. Thanks for the update! Can't wait for more!
| I liked the part about him re-stringing her bow. That seems like a very Sesshomaru-like thing to do. If Sesshomaru had been thinking about Kagome for some time... Then, the last paragraph reinforced this impression. Poor, clueless Master Jaken!
| A promising first chapter. Very well-written. On to the next!
Saholia (Chapter 3) - Wed 16 Sep 2009
| LOL, poor Jaken..but he really should know better by now. :D You're doing a wonderful job with the themes. Please, keep 'em coming! :)
autumngold (Chapter 3) - Wed 16 Sep 2009
| Shame on Jaken. How dare he question his lord! Maybe he just likes to go flying through the air? Great update!
autumngold (Chapter 2) - Mon 14 Sep 2009
| I love the fact that Sesshoumaru explains that he didn't mean to save Kagome, but then he stays with her until she's awake and returns her weapons. If he didn't care about her, wouldn't he have just left her there? Silly, almost sweet, demon lord! Great update! Please post again soon!
stars (Chapter 2) - Mon 14 Sep 2009
| please updata
| Very nice first chapter. I love the description you give of the events and her feelings and thoughts.
stars (Chapter 1) - Sun 13 Sep 2009
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