This was well written. Ch 1 was extremely philosophical and touched on all the things that make love and relationships the imperfect entity that they are - the very opposite of the demon who's name has perfect in it. He seemed genuinely torn by his desires and his pride, as all sentient beings capable of love are I guess. Ch 2 was fun because his obsession overruled his logical mind and left him red-handed so to speak. I really hope you continue this.

I actually found this to be really smart. I think that the questions asked here are very intelligent. Many people idealize love, and whomever they think would be their perfect match, but they should also know that the one that they want is not a perfect person - no one is. I think this is really great. Good job. It is a nice quick read, and very thought provoking. Kudos!

I actually found this to be really smart. I think that the questions asked here are very intelligent. Many people idealize love, and whomever they think would be their perfect match, but they should also know that the one that they want is not a perfect person - no one is. I think this is really great. Good job. It is a nice quick read, and very thought provoking. Kudos!

I liked this chapter better than the first one.  Maybe because I caught on to what the changes indicated.  His thoughts were quite amusing.  Well done.

Your idea is good, it's always interesting to look into Sesshoumaru's mind.  I think this would work better if you didn't go back and forth from italics to regular font.  The entire story takes place in his mind, the text changes make it confusing.  As he's going from one though to the other you could say things like: ...on one hand.... but on the other...  Something along those lines.  At first when I was reading this I thought the sentences in italics were part of a song or poem but then came to the conclusion that it was just when his thoughts changed.  Anyways this is a very interesting idea.

Very cute beginning for this drabble serial and I really hope you decide to continue it.  I was a bit confused as to how Sesshoumaru knew what 'the color of the fertile soil of Egypt right after the Nile recedes' looked like, so perhaps explaining that would have been a bit better.  But other than that, great job :).

Ducky here!! I think this will be a very entertaining fic should you continue.  I like how Sesshoumaru is the one with the fantasy in the fic – not Kagome!  I loved the interaction in the second chapter with Sesshoumaru and Kagome's hair.  Again, normally I read Kagome being obsessed with Sesshoumaru's hair.  The shoe is on the other foot now!! ^__^   Wonderful writing.  However, I think that you should get a beta.  You don’t have too many spelling/grammar mistakes (very very few) but there are some awkward sentences that need straightening out.  Good job and keep on writing!

ducky out!

lmao...oh my Sesshy's in deep doody now...this was a delightful read but it doesn't seem to be quite finished, it also seems like it would be better suited for the 'collections of oneshots' category, or the 'chapter stories' one... there were a few spelling and gramatical errors in this work but nothing a little editing won't fix...i also don't quite understand the italic verses in your first chapter, in the second one they are obviously his thoughts, but in the first chapter it isn't immediately apparent that they are his thoughts, i thought they might have been song lyrics at first...lol...anyhow a great read and i hope you continue it, ill be faving it just in case you do keep going with it...keep up the good work:D