T_T   I was in tears the entire story. Poor Kagome! Stupid Sesshoumaru and his pride! But a great story still. 

Sigb it got "teenager" again lol. Like Im watching degrassi or something. You write well but I think its just my preferences. I don't particularly like suicide or how dramatic Kagome is over a guy she just started talking to. Inuyasha I kinda get, but ecen he doesn't seem worth it since she did say"friend". She got borderline annoying! Im not trying to be mean, its just missing something to make it work. Depression was not it.

You're a good writter, this chapter, I didn't expect it, it was so fast! But it didn't seem rushed or anything this time around. It seemed like something his beast would do and he wouldn't accept. Excellent!!!!!

"No one cares"???? This is a little fast paced don't you think? She just met him is she expecting love already? Seems a bit like a  "teen fantasy" if you ask me. The writing isn't bad but some parts seem a little cheesy like her kissing his forehead when they barely know each other and he attempted to kill her before. Everything else seem pretty accurate about Kagome, you portrayed her right. Sesshomaru on the other hand, not so much. He seems like a teen, an at the same time he seems like the Sesshomaru in the beginning of the Inuyasha manga where he would taunt his opponents. i will keep reading :)

:/ ok what the heck. he says she's dirt, and then he kisses her >.< this is annoying 

On top of that, there are alot of misspelt words and the format causes the story to be a bit corny and cheesy

Had to stop reading. can you give a suicide warning? I hate suicides

I liked the plot, but the second time she tried to kill herself was too much. I'm severely depressed. Infact, I'm on suicide watch right now. But you can't use suicide as a way to get people to like you better, or to feel guilty. It reminds me of something an immature angsty teen would do. It kinda pissed me off. You're a really good writer, just work on making it a little more serious if she's going to attempt suicide. It's not something you throw yourself into the first sign something might go wrong. Take it from me, that suicide is serious talk, it's not just, 'Oh, hey, I totes just had a major binge, I'm gonna kill myself' or 'Damn, my dad threw my into the fireplace AGAIN, I'll have to cancel that shoot and pop a few handfuls of pills' or 'Wow, my date ended in Mason raping me again, I'm going to go hang myself.' That stuff happens to me all the time, but I'm still fighting, and I'm 15 for christ's sake. I think Kagome would be fighting too, she's not one to give up that easily. And I think you should talk to someone, if no one knows about your depression. Don't go it alone, babe(:

I would love to read this but your formatting makes it almost impossible. Are you aware that each time a different character speaks starts a new paragraph?

You misspelled Ramen throughout the entire chapter. 

--Kaminoko (c)2011

I just started reading Life Debt, and the concept is inviting, the style is easy to read and enjoyable to follow.  I find the

descriptions very colorful and the characters true to form.  I want to continue reading this story but am having a problem.

As I try to go to the 2nd chapter, I get a white screen with a message that says it can not be found.  Have you pulled the story

for some reason?  I hope not.  It is a very interesting story and I look forward to reading it.  Can you see what has happened to

it?  Looking forward to hearing from you.   Thank you for you assistance.          rainwitches@aol.com