Hmmm... Okay, I'm gonna give you my honest opinion. But please don't be abashed. First: grammar. It's has a little too many mistakes. Maybe if you had reread it a bunch of times before posting it you have seen them. Second: space between paragraphs and dialogue. It's utmost annoying to read something so clogged together. Third: the content. I don't see anything... intriguing in the story yet. Maybe it's because it's the first chapter and it's merely around eight-hundred words. However, I feel like Sango and Kagome are two school girls talking about the 'hotguy' and Sesshoumaru is the prick that by coincidence heard Kagome say out loud how she felt for him. It's kinda OOC for Sesshoumaru to sit beside Kags like that and ask her something like that. Though that was kinda the part I most liked. I encourage you to continue if you KNOW there is something else other than each other finding out how the other feels in the story. Because, if that's the only purpose of the story -- which I doubt is, considering its title -- it will become merely a boring love story like all other boring love stories that people only read to pass their time while the OTHER GOOD STORIES are being updated. .. .. .. .. . Hehe... I feel like I talked rather much! :P Please, take into consideration that I am being totally honest with you when I tell you that if you fix these little issues in your story, I think you will be able to have a good story in your hands. Don't mind the grammar if you don't find a beta or don't seem to be able to correct the errors yourself. But, PLEASE, do mind the space between paragraphs hehe... And the plot! The pace is kinda fast. Does Sesshoumaru has to know how she feels from the first chapter? If yes, then I suppose there must be something that will go wrong later on... right? ....>.. . .. >>> .. ..>> .. .>>. ughghhuhghghg... I'll shut up now :D ROCK ON YUKI CROSS! I'll be cheering for you n_n