LOL I adore stories where Shippo and Rin help out or play match maker, so cute!

This piece was very short and sweet. I enjoyed it.

Though Inuyasha's betraying Kagome is a good medium for Kagome to be caught up in Sesshoumaru's arms, it is often overused. You will want to try to stray away from that position in the future, as I believe it will lead to an overall better story.

You've probably already heard, that you will need to work out your tenses. Your situations between the characters are a bit rushed as well.

All in all, you have lots of promise. Just take your time and keep at it! You'll be a pro in no time!

When Sesshoumaru knows what he wants, he just goes for it, doesn't he? XD Very cute one-shot. You need to watch your tenses though -- you tend to flip between present and past quite a bit. Tenses are tricky, so probably the best way to check is by reading your story aloud. Generally you'll catch things you'd otherwise miss by reading out loud. 

Also, remember that dialogue needs punctuation too. When someone is speaking and you intend to follow it with something like "he said", you put a comma at the end. So, for example: "I love you," said Sesshoumaru. Or even, "I love you," Sesshoumaru intoned. But if you've got a piece of dialogue that doesn't directly relate to the text following it, you put a period. "I love you." Sesshoumaru smiled. If it were '"I love you," Sesshoumaru smiled'" then you'd be saying that Sesshoumaru smiled the entire sentence. 

Grammar is a tricky thing to master. You might want to try just thumbing through a few published works, and paying attention to the way they use punctuation. Just because it's published doesn't automatically mean it's correct (even editors miss things on occasion), so if something looks odd remember to look it up, but you're more likely to get a wider variety of good examples there than on the internet. 

You should also consider getting a beta. There are plenty of friendly and generous souls in the Forums willing to beta. Editing is a tricky process, and editing your own work can be difficult. Sometimes a second set of eyes can catch things that you might miss. Plus, betas are always great for bouncing ideas off of. Usually a beta can help you out of a tight spot if you paint yourself into a corner while writing. 

Your writing definitely shows promise. Keep at it! Learning to write is a constant process -- even professional writers are constantly learning more about their craft. And the best part is: you can only learn by doing. So keep writing, and keep learning. 

Thanks for sharing.

Nefret.

Hullo! It's a good story, from what I can see. I think it's a little rushed and too emotionless, though. You also switch between present and past tenses, so watch out for that. Thanks for the read!

very cute i liked it a little fast but very sweet