I truthfully dont know why this hasn't garnered more attention, other than that it hasn't been updated in so long. Because you really have a great start here! It appears to be well edited, as I didnt find any glairingly obvious grammar or spelling mistakes (although they arn't my strong suit.) I really liked how you have characterized Inuyasha in this, and I thought that line about her maybe still having something to do, to be insightful for him (he's prone to a few rare moments like this! lol) Hope to see you update!
Ikaru (Chapter 1) - Fri 07 May 2010
This was very interesting, Im curious as to who this new villian you have created is...Over all this was very well written, however there were a few spelling and grammar errors that a quick editing session will easily fix. I truely enjoyed the read and will be looking forward to your next update...Keep up the good work!
Hairann (Chapter 1) - Fri 30 Apr 2010
Seemed a bit rush and there were a few errors with sentence structure, but all around it was an interesting beginning and I hope that you continue this story.
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