Wow. that child is evil. ...lol. There are a few grammatical mistakes, but that's understandable. Everyone has those. @.@ I has a beta who tears off my comma key a lot. XD Also, when you are switching perspective, it is good to have something to show such, like and ellipse etc. Otherwise, I did enjoy this. ^.^ Good job on your first fan fiction.

ok this is the author speaking. ok as many people that have read this story how come i dont have any reviews. come on guys i need some reviews. flames advice or anything will do. i dont care what but i would really be happy if i knew what you think