If they are in Japan, why would the officer read them the Miranda Rights? Isn't that term used only in the USA?
...just curious. I do know that that procedure (i.e you have the right to remain silent...) and term came from a US court case. Do the Japanese have a different procedure? I'm German. I don't know the answer, I just thought I'd point it out.
I like the story so far btw. Good hook, though it comes in the second chapter. Might I make a bold sugestion? If you started with naked Sesshomaru running into her, your readers would be hooked off the bat and you could string us along, slowly giving us the reason how Sesshoumaru got there, instead of handing the answer to us on a silver platter at the begining. Mysteries are fun! Not that it really matters cause I'm hooked now anyway... but it's just a thought...
| I am sorry I am just getting around to reading this. Wow what to say... this is amusing. Not something I expected at all (hence the title I suppose) and the end. I wonder what will happen next.
| OMG! This ought be good when she recobvers enough. lol. Can't wait to see what happens!
this is fantastic! i can't wait to see what happens ^_^ more please :D -r0o
| Pretty good start you have here. You left an interesting cliffhanger. I only wish your chapter was longer so I could enjoy it even more so. Good work and please update soon:)
| Good cliffy! I can't wait till the next chapter! That's so like Sesshomaru, "I'm a demon. It doesn't matter if I'm naked in front of other people." Lol! That was so funny! Update soon! :D
Just him waking up and being gawked makes me excited for more!
As an added note, if you're ever in need of a beta let me know. No, it's not so I can see it before everyone else...well, maybe it is XD
Keep it up, lady!
Momo
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