I like the concept. But I am frustrated with how you portray Kagome. Frankly she sounds like a ninny. If she is going to be a strong enough character to match Sesshomaru you are going to have to do something. Right now all she does is complain and lust after Sesshomaru. And that is the plot for many stories about Kikyo not Kagome... Please do something to make her into a character that I care about when I am reading this story.
The rest of the characters are fun even though all they do is put down Kagome, actually the more I think about it the more I don't like the interactions of kagome with the rest. They don't actually sound like real friends. Just people who feel that Kagome isn't keeping up with their lifestyles and either needs to put out or get out...
This was a very entertaining idea for a fic. I've never considered Sesshou being a stripper... but this was definitely tastefully done. I can't wait to see what happens next. Keep up the good work and update soon :P
wonderful story! cant wait to see more! - r0o
Junella (Chapter 1) - Sun 07 Jun 2009
| *gives you a thumbs-up* I like XD Sess as a striptease dancer...yum :)
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