I'm confused about something in this chapter. Didn't Sesshoumaru already use Tenseiga?? When she was ill? So wouldn't that mean it could be used on her again at this point in the story? Great story though. :D Looking forward to reading the rest.
Oh wow! This is so good a story. Are you going to continue or is this the end? I really enjoyed it.
I understand why you were writing these last few chapters so quickly. It is very hard to work and go to school. But I really appreciate that you take time out to write wonderful stories for us.
Except the disrespectful way in which the guests spoke out of turn.
but slowly he was learning to accept change and progress in a way
I have proudly borne
If they please you, then it would be my pleasure for you to name them,” Kagome uttered, biting her tongue, even though she hated the way the pups were treated like objects or presents.
and shocked voices that rose
now Sesshomaru's turn to name the final pup
This Sesshomaru presents the heir to the Western Lands
It was as the guests were leaving
The Imperial pain??? :DDD LOL!
After a couple of weeks she was beginning to fall into a routine.
feed each pup as they woke,
with the constant incoming scrolls from other lords,
for him to come over and sit with them between reading scrolls.
he couldn’t bear her antics.
Her fidgeting caused him discomfort.
You needn't be original should you choose not to be.
“is there something the matter.”
Writing a littl fast, were we? Just trying to get it all down before you forgot it all? LOL
he was constantly checking in on the women,
The inu growled lowly, it was his way of trying to make her change her mind.
and wrapping ?his? arms around her.
she found that she was dressed in you light inner layer. (Huh?)
with the exception of Inuyasha, Kagome was told.
at this point that he realized he was still dressed in very little.
He growled while his eyes bled red.
but his instincts ran wild.
when a new sound greeted the inu lord’s ears
with a midnight crescent on the small forehead adorning the pale face.
He still wanted to know how they contained pure and raw power
Now I feel like crying. His father was such a sad person. I am glad you made his mother so nice. This was a lovely chapter for all it's sadness.
before you bear him a child.
Does this mean her mother-in-law approves of her?
His guard was always up and he never let her wander far from him.
My speed rivals no one's, therefore, it is best
“Okay, then, how can I help?”
each hand bearing many smaller octopi.
She was assisted in donning her formal kimono, (Donning is to put on; adorning is to decorate.)
He darted his eyes open his mate as if to ‘tsk’ her before the silence of the room was broken by laughter. (Huh?)
Her fingers played with the end of the long strands of raven locks.
?he? was still on edge about her reaction.
Now that she would live a life as long as his,
Unable to bear with the idea that she might catch onto his thoughts. (Bear is to carry, as well as the animal. Bare is to go naked.)
But in a century's time (Possessive, not plural)
Where do you get these ideas? Your solution to her humanity is excellent, if not brilliant!
until he finished replying to the neglected mating requests,
With each step closer, Kagome's breath grew heavy.
There was a pause, where Kagome was able to catch the hesitant scowl
The exchange would mean my power would be the source of your power, rather than your innocence being the source.
OH WOW! It's hot in here.
and look over and decline twenty-two mating requests,
"This Sesshomaru wonders sometimes if you have the ability to read minds miko," (Wander means: to ramble, rove, stray, etc. Wonder means: to think, speculate curiously.)
This one is a little obscure, but, on the whole, very well written.
It annoyed her that she feared the inu for even one moment.
Her varrying range of emotions couldn't hold (Just suggestions to make it flow more smoothly.)
"If another dares to touch this Sesshomaru's ?possession? they will pay for it with their life.
Still loving this. You are pacing it so nicely, too, and the fairy, oh, I love fairies! And what does Chihiro mean?
Of course, you know, I would have to let you know what I noticed:
Suddenly Kagome sensed a flicker and she stood, facing the area of the highly concentrated ?aura? of_______?
The familiar power of Sesshomaru picked up speed
I absolutely adore the Sesshoumaru you've portrayed here. It takes a man to respect rules, and a greater one to go against them when the need for it exists. The respectful Lord you've portrayed is very in characteristic; I've always believed Sesshoumaru to be an individual who respects what he deems worthy. Good job!
I'm enjoying these little vignettes so much. I did find one little thing though:
It took some time of convincing but Kagome managed to pursuade the inu
Totally enjoyable. I love the wickedness of the children. LOL. There was one little thing:
If only to salvage some dignity she decided to use what she could.
autumngold (Chapter 18) - Sun 20 Dec 2009
Kagome is so lucky that Sesshoumaru is allowing himself to change to keep her happy. I just hope that she can protect him and her pups if people try to protest against the change. Thank you so much for the update! Hope you have a very happy holiday!
autumngold (Chapter 17) - Mon 14 Dec 2009
I admire Kagome and Sesshoumaru for still having time for each other with triplets. Kagome is lucky she even has time to breathe. Thanks for the update!
autumngold (Chapter 16) - Thu 03 Dec 2009
How sweet! I'm so glad that Sesshoumaru has his heir and two girls besides. Why do I get the feeling that his hair will turn grey trying to watch over his two beautiful girls? Thank you for having Kagome come through the delivery safely! Now I just hope that Sesshoumaru keeps his promise and continues to love her! Thank you for the update!
You're doing a great job ;)
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