Mystery: Lol - sesshoumaru thinking kagome was committing suicide was a laugh. I normally dont read drabbles because they're too short but this is pretty interersting!
Surprise: This chapter reminded me of a jack-in-the-box. idk, my mind wanders into places i dont want to know. Sesshoumaru is really a curious guy even though he pretends to be aloof (*cough*rin*cough*). It was a surpise for kagome but a promise as well. niiiice!
Suspicion: Aww kagome, you were never the best liar! *snarfle* you're really good at this! It's harder to express yourself with fewer words than with many. Each chapter is so good! (i can't get over the fact that i actually like a drabble...bizarre..)
Decision: Kagome is so impulsive. She's just like "what the heck. I'll tell him." lawl...
Wound: And Kagome thinks pretty well on her feet! Yes - no matter how much people protect her, she is always kidnapped. Using that to her advantage was pretty crafty!
Honesty: Also Kagome is talkative. TALK TALK TALK TALK.... i dont blame her tho! I liked that you didnt write out Sesshoumaru's gratitude and just used kagome to imply his thankfulness. Nice tech!
Watching: Le-Gasp! Do i detect hints of...romance?!
Human: Yes indeed, Sesshoumaru's heart is melting faster than an icecube in hell...(but his heart is a ginormous iceberg so it might take a while....lol)
Worry: It was too good to last. Kagome always failed at ninja skills. (Kakashi: you get an F! An F, I tell you!!)
Secret: Noooo this is the last chapter for now?!?!?
Overall: 1. Okay, grammar/spelling/mechanics = beautiful. 2. Concept/how the story started = 456/10 3. My favorite so far is chapter one: mystery. As I've mentioned, i dont like drabbles too much, but your fic is just worth a reading and more! 4. FUNNY!!!! (and i wont give specific examples because everything is freaking hilarious.) 5. Update. AHORA!!!! (espanol for NOW!) thank you! <3
i really like drabbles, especially ones that tell a story. It's very well-written and my own curiosity can't wait to see what happens next! Keep up the good work.
I love interconnected drabbles like this! It's like I can get my fix in a very small amount of time! Good job!
This is a cute story so far. It's well written and the drabbles are tied together well. I look forward to seeing where the plot goes.
I love like connected ficlets like this. They are short and to the point, but still give us insight into the characters. Well done. I do hope that you update this again soon, as I quickly became hooked.
Ikaru (Chapter 9) - Fri 29 Jan 2010
very good start, everythings short sweet and to the point, can't wait to see what you come up with next!!
Hairann (Chapter 9) - Fri 29 Jan 2010
Very good start so far and can not wait to see what happens next. Keep up the good work.
Hairann
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