Nooooo.....you can't stop there!!! Usually I hate weak Kagome stories, but this one kinda dragged me in. I really hope that she gets stronger as this goes on. I really liked the chapter with her mother, as she was listing the people that Kagome had saved, that was really well done. I feel like I have read this somewhere else, did you post this on another site? Is there more to this story? I hope you post more to this really soon! Please?? It seems really well written, with few typos and spelling/grammar issues. Keep up!

Wow, what pain and torture you've instilled in my heart about our poor Kagome. All that depression and loss seeped into your words and descriptions. There are a couple of spelling errors and a few missed words in the first couple chapters and the flashback chapter did not need to be solely in italics - you clearly mentioned in chapter 1 that she was stuck in the Feudal era, so any conversation she was having with her brother and mother, clearly had to be a memory. Chap 3 seemed a little rushed and there were a lot more mistakes in it, like :

Their fates had been sealed from the moment they

‘met me’ thought Kagome.

For continuity sake, all thoughts should be in italics but you clealy went back and forth, making it a little difficult to figure out if she was 'thinking it' or "speaking it".

You also have decribed the devastation of the unknown village 2x but have yet to say which village, where, how long ago or any other inclination as to why it happened.

I do hope you continue this story...there is plenty of promise to it.

This is a very interesting beginning. She is obviously in a great deal of emotional turmoil, and you portrayed that quite well, it was easy to imagine her pain. There were some spelling and grammar errors, as well as a few missing words in the third chapter, but this is all nothing a quick editing session won't fix. Also you whole second chapter is all in italics, I realise it is a flashback, but it is unnesessary to italicise the whole chapter to illustrate this point. The third chapter isn't up to par with the first two, the first two chapters were written rather well, but the third seemed to have the most errors in it. However a little editing and this story will be able to shine brightly, I'll look foreward to more of you work in the future.

Interesting start though I do have a few things to point out as far as structure goes, but the story itself is good so far.  First I'd recomend always staying away from words in all caps as they tend to interupt the flow and can be rather distracting.  The paragraph that starts with the sentence 'The thing that is keeping me unhappy is my uselessness.' is a bit too big, which can be hard on the eyes when reading from a computer screen, I'd suggest making it into at least two paragraphs. 

Your stand alone words or phrases, such as '

I am Useless...

Useless...

Usless...

USELESS!!!!!!!'

are a bit disruptive as well.  I think it might interupt less if you put it on one line.  Like 'I am useless, useless, useless.  Useless!'  It'll give the idea that she's chanting it before finally screaming it one last time, which is what I believe you were going for, without interupting the flow of the story as much.  The same with your ending words to the first chapter...

'

If only...

If only I wasn't so...

pathetic...

so...

careless...

so...

weak...

so...

useless...'

Instead try 'If only.  If only I wasn't so pathetic, so careless, so weak, so useless.'  It helps to make it feel like she's really beating herself up, rather than just listing her faults. 

For chapter two, I'm not sure if you noticed but you put the entire thing in italics.  For chapter three, I'd recomend breaking up the first paragraph into two and try not to use bold to emphasize words, italics or 's usually are better to use as they don't interupt the flow as much.  Also watch for your puncuation in that one,  there were quite a few missing, but nothing a quick edit wouldn't fix.

I'm in love with this story. Its amazing! I like how you portray Kagome. I think you are an awesome writer. I did really find anything confusing or misspelled. I loved your cliff hang. I hope you post your next chapter soon.