Um now it just seems like its a Inuyasha and Kagome pairing not a Sesshomaru and Kagome pairing like it should be.

I like the 2 new chapters but lots of words seem to have been left out of chapter 17 & a few in chapter 18, this sentence near the bottom of 18 for example doesn't make sense because of missing words; Shivering she pulled the wicker cloak closer to was he? there should be something between closer to & was he? for it to make sense but since it's not there it doesn't.

Im not going to lie, your story is very hard to follow and the charachters are terribly ooc. Your idea is interesting but you go so fast that the development is hard to follow. You might really benefit from a beta. (You should see my original work before my beta gets a hold of it.) Again interesting idea just need some organization and a little more text. Also this site has a chapter word count rule, its 700. So fix that and you should have a great story here.