Nice

I dont try to be a critic but this really sucks. Kagome will never do that.Great idea but very poor presentation.Sorry.

:c

From my name you could guess why I didnt like it.

I liked it.... well, the part where his mane fell from her lip distracted me a little....

But I like it all the same.

Well good plot but it really needs work on the spelling (& in a few cases word choice, I saw form instead of from & your instead of you're) all over the place, heck you even have Sesshoumaru misspelled, it's either Sesshoumaru or Sesshomaru your choice not Sesshmaru, you have cilt instead of clit & you hit my pet peeve, tongue isn't spelled toang or touang.  I'd definitely run it through a spellchecker at least or get a decent beta to fix the goofs.

oh my...XD haha this was amazing. hehe loved it! :)