Different concept, I haven't read many stories that the kids are centric.  Your original characters are interesting and I'm curious to find out what happens to them.  I also want to know how Kagome and Sesshoumaru died.  Forty children seems excessive but you provided an intriguing reason for having that many.  You develop the story more by answering the above questions.  Overall good.

Good job! Even though I haven't read the prior story, I could still follow this. you did wonderful considering english isn't your first language. I might just have to go read the first story. Keep up the good work!

Please excuse me for not reading the first story, which I may do now, because this one was so nice. I like that even though Sess and Kags are gone, their children are growing into strong adults, knowing their responsibilities, and taking them on, even if they are somewhat reluctant about paperwork. I like how you have blended the personalities. For having English as a second (or third or fourth or whatever) language, you have done really well. There was only one spelling error that I saw. Great job. Keep up with your writing!

This was an interesting follow-up, and it was easy to follow the story even though I haven't read the previous fic. Even though english isn't your first language you did extremely well I must say, this was an awesome fic, kudos to you! My only concern is that, other than being mentioned by the children, Sesshoumaru and Kagome never appear in this fic.This is a Sesshoumaru and Kagome fanfic site, so if you continue with your idea of moving on to the different children and Sesshoumaru and Kagome are still dead, it technically isn't a Sesshoumaru and Kagome fic. My suggestion would be to remove this fic as a one-shot and put it as an epilogue to your 'never-ending bond' fic.

40 kids?? how old was she when she passed? how did she and Sess both die?? I have to say that was quite a oneshot in itself, even without reading the chapter story. You did really well for english not being your native language - only a few minor errors. I am intrigued by the story that lead up to this and look forward to seeing and reading more about all these kids.

I like your story… but I think it would have been better with more Sess and more Kag!! ^__^  Good overall plot – kinda reminds me of Fullmetal Alchemist.  Roy Mustang hates the paperwork!!  If English isn’t your first language, you’re pretty damn good at it!  <The sad part is that native English speakers are terrible writers compared to non-native speakers.>  I think you should get a beta though.  Betas would prove to be useful especially since English isn’t your first language.  Good job on the story, but try to keep it sesskag! 

ducky out!

Not too bad, and pretty easy to follow without reading the story it stems from first.  Only noticed a few errors such as king instead of kind, though truthfully I was kinda put off by the idea of her having 40 kids, even if they were all twins+.  I can not imagine the human body being able to handle that, no matter who the father was, but it was a nice one-shot sequel none the less.