I like the plot of your story, but it feels like you are rushing it too much, and too.. well straightforward. Personally I think they are all a little OOC, usually it doesn't really bother me, but in this case, it kind of ruined the story for me. Sorry :/
uuummmm i don't know if this has already been pointed out and if it has i apologise for being inadvertantly repedative, but a foot is twelve inches so if a person is 5'12" then they are actually 6' even.
It's a shame you haven't gotten more reviews thus far, I know some people might be turned off by the fast pace, character portrayal, or grammer errors, but looking past all of those this is a very excellent story, and I'm definitly looking forward to more chapters being posted, hopefully sometime soon. =D
angela (Chapter 19) - Thu 26 Nov 2009
wow, i just love this story you are very creative. I have read it once before, and i have loved it ever since then. I love how you portrayed all the characters including Naraku. Keep up the great work and i can't wait for the next chapter.
*is the answer to the riddle: the Moon?*
again keep up the great work.
InuLover
i love this story since i first started reading it and i like it a lot too i love evry part to this story and the plot is good too your a very great author who wrote this very great and wonderful story.
i love this story since i first started reading it and i like it a lot too i love evry part to this story and the plot is good too your a very great author who wrote this very great and wonderful story.
quita (Chapter 16) - Mon 22 Dec 2008
| this is the most driven stoy out there with you plot twist and love pairing
| I really liked the new chapter! Keep up the good work, and I can't wait to see what's coming next!
| I love this fic so much! It is by far my favorite! Can't wait to read the next chapter!
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