This is growing into a really big story! I really enjoy reading the long fics, and appreciate the immense amount of time and creativity you are devoting to it. I continue to love to hate Askura. I keep waiting for the other shoe to drop where she is concerned.
There is one point I would like to mention to you, it is very minor and PURELY subjective. When Kagome talks about her own blue eyes or other physical attributes it makes her come across, in my mind as a reader, as excessively vain. Similar to the curly haired girl in "Peanuts" who is always pointing out her "naturally curly" hair to others. Kagome narrating her own story gives an excellent opportunity for you to describe how she FEELS inside herself, but makes it difficult to describe how she LOOKS on the outside without making her seem to be superficial. It goes without saying that it is your decision, as the writer, to decide how to manage this.
Keep up the great work, I can't wait to find out what happens next!
stars (Chapter 20) - Mon 29 Mar 2010
please updata alot sooner
jojo661538 (Chapter 19) - Tue 26 Jan 2010
its a great story i hope you keep up the great work ^_^
I'm sorry about your dad. I give my respects and hope u feel (Chapter 20) - Fri 06 Nov 2009
I love this story plawsse update soon (Chapter 20) - Fri 06 Nov 2009
I'm so sorry about your loss. My prayers and thoughts be with you as you try to get through each day. Try to remember all the good things and times, and it will get easier. It'll be hard, but you'll get through it. And, take as much time as you need.
stars (Chapter 19) - Fri 14 Aug 2009
please updata alot sooner than what you have been doing.
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