Your summary is MUCH improved. And I liked how she got her revenge. Ouch! I haven't done that to anyone in a looong time. Thanks for reminding me. :-) You had some minor punctuation problems, but who doesn't have those every once in a while? I know I do! And the story reads much smoother in this format. You might try finding a beta to help you catch those. Especially if you get into writing a longer fic. Two pairs of eyes are better than one! I know I read over something over and over again to try and catch mistakes, post it, and someone else sees something I missed. Great job, though! Very much improved!!

Cute! The format is MUCH improved over the first chapter. ^^ Theres still a few grammar issues- mostly missing puncation at the end of sentences. Nothing big, just something else to keep in mind as you post more and more. If you get into a long fic, you might want to find a beta to help you double check for those pesky grammar erros (I would be lost without my beta) ^^. ~Daapy

It was cute. But from a visual end, never set up your fic like you did. By using all bold font, centering everything, and setting it in double spaced, the over all look of the fic is off putting. Sorry if that seems weird, but its true. Also, put a seperater of some sort before your a/n's. Even something as basic as a line of ~~~ between the end of the fic and the start of note works. Good luck on the writing thing!

to cute

I thought it was pretty cute and funny, I would like to read more.

I liked this. It has potential. Tip: NEVER down play your own work, especially in a summary. You use the summary to draw people into your work. You also have some spacing issues, too, but that might just be the system. You can edit and go back to fix those, so it reads smoother. LC