I really like it but do have 2 corrections/comments; you may want to do something about the dragons names, about half the time you misspell them from the names you first gave them, Arike & Ekira, in the latest chapter (chapter 8) you mostly have it as Akire & Erika, I've noticed about 3 or 4 different spellings in other chapters. Also <!-- /* Style Definitions */ p.MsoNormal, li.MsoNormal, div.MsoNormal {mso-style-parent:""; margin:0in; margin-bottom:.0001pt; mso-pagination:widow-orphan; font-size:12.0pt; font-family:"Times New Roman"; mso-fareast-font-family:"Times New Roman";} @page Section1 {size:8.5in 11.0in; margin:1.0in 1.25in 1.0in 1.25in; mso-header-margin:.5in; mso-footer-margin:.5in; mso-paper-source:0;} div.Section1 {page:Section1;} --> ceiling isn't spelled celling.

hello, I just happened across your story now and am reading the first few chapters all at once. I thought I should point out a slight internal discrepancy: in the introductory chapter, you refer to the stuff that falls from the sky as "acid" (I assumed perhaps that this was an intentional attempt to distinguish this story from the McCaffrey "Pern" universe, from which the universe in this story draws a lot of inspiration).  However, in chapter 4, you begin referring to the "threads" that fall from the sky (without ever explaining to the reader that the threads are the acid). 

I am fully aware that in the Pern universe, "threads" are what fall from the sky (and they burn kind of like acid), and I am sure many of your readers are also familiar with that universe, but perhaps not all of your readers are familiar with Pern [side note to any readers who haven't read Anne McCaffrey's stories: you should! they are great fantasy works - up there with Ursula LeGuin and Tad Williams' fantasy universes as some of the best ever, IMHO]. Um, yeah - apologies for that little divergence. Anyhow, I thought you might want to be aware so that you might either edit Ch. 1 to refer consistently to "threads" or edit later chapters to refer to "acid," and/or make the explicit connection in Ch. 4 that threads = acid.

As for the story itself - I must admit I usually refrain from commenting this early in a story, since it's hard to get a good sense of what the story is about even 4 chapters in - but so far at the very least you've caught my attention and I'm interested in reading more. I never read the Eragon books, but I did see the movie (ugh, maybe that's why I never read the books - that movie was horribly done! I'm sure the movie's not a credit to the actual books since they seem to be well received). Anyhow, so far, the aspects of Eragon that you've incorporated here are much more palatable that the movie, so that's a good start. Also as I'm sure you've gathered, I love the Pern universe, so all similarities to that universe bring up happy nostalgia as I read (it's been waaaay more years than I will ever admit since I read those books, I'd be dating myself).  But just out of authorly respect, it might be nice to include some kind of disclaimer to the effect that you've explicitly drawn on certain elements from McCaffrey's work, and from the author of Eragon as well...and maybe more? (I'm not saying you're doing anything wrong per se, but it's always most respectful to your readers as well as the other authors to credit your sources. And you may even introduce a few readers to new authors!)

awesome. thanks for the update. cant wait for you next one.

i must say i'm so captivated by this story! i cant wait to see more! - r0o

Wow. I really like this story. It is so different and creative. I cannot wait to read more!

Awesome story!  I can't wait to read more.  :)  

it's really great! i can't wait to see what will happen next!  and how the 'shadow walker' lesson will go! *grin*

will sess' father or inuyasha cause problem to kagome?

i really can't wait!!

please please, update as soon as you can !!!

i must say i have no idea what made me read this its not my normal fic to want to read but i must also say that i think for me aleast you've made something beautiful. this was well written and leaves me hungry for more. i cannot wait for your next update! - r0o

Yay! update! You keep missing endings to your words like 'y' and 'ing'. But I really enjoy the story. Thanks for the information about the onions and the egg, that really helped.

Woah. I hope you're going to explain why Arike and Ekira know eachother. Clever trick with the names though.
Oh and your transition from the riders' pov to the dragons' pov needed a little more fluidity, it was kinda choppy.

Wow!

Once in a long while, a truly original story appears... it seems yours seems to fit in this category. It reminds me of the books from Ann McCaffrey, and it thrills me because I love them so much... and then, you added your own twist to all of it, and that's just awesome.

I look forward to your next chapter!

Dewa mata

Interesting, very Riders of Pern and Dragon Spell meets Eragon, but in a nicely inventive manner. There were many times in the first chapter where you'd wright "might dragon" I'm not sure if you were wanting the word "mighty" or had something else in mind. Otherwise the plot, though it felt almost predictable at first, took a nice turn. It seems solid so far. I'm excited to see what you come up with for this story.

Really good, slightly reminded me of Eragon. Can't wait for the next chapters!

Yay you're moving this story from spark :D... Can't wait until new chapters start showing up