Yep, seems like the begining of a fairly good story. I look forward to read the next installment.
It's a little 'raw' tho, nothing a good little beta or at least a quick edit couldn't fix. Just some capitalisations and a few mistakes, it could be so much more pleasurable to read your fic without them marring the text as a whole...
Anyway, I find your OC interesting and I'm eager to learn more. Please keep on the good job!
Dewa mata
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