Like it so far, but the story moved very fast in places, and, since I'm not really up on as much Japanese mythology as I'd like, I got lost a few times. You might want to go into a bit more background when you name characters. 
      
I really enjoy the way that you type.  And how in most parts the words flow smoothly.  I see some errors probably due to, typing to fast.  <br> 
The story seems to be off to a great start, and I would love to see the spectacular finish, that I think this story can make. <br> 
:) 
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-FangedBeasty 
      
Calix (Chapter 1) -  Sun 28 Dec 2008 
| Nice start. Flows well with the mythology. I had to take out my reference books for some of the gods. I'm looking forward to seeing how this story continues.
       
   
   
 
 
 
										 
									
									
																										
								
								
								
																								
															
													
					
				
								
				
				
			
				
				
		
				
	
			
			
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