Me gustó mucho pero padias haber dejado que diera a luz saver que eran si cachorros/as

Hi!  I found this to be an interesting plot and story!  I am wondering though if you'd like a beta to correct the spelling errors and misplaced words in this fic?  I'm not perfect, but I'd be willing to do so if you'd like.   I'm a full time college student so I might be a little slow (especially since I'm taking Healthcare statistics this term) but I could send you each chapter as I go, for you to review before reposting it.   Let me know if you'd be interested.

I like your idee it is intresting yet this Neon rimaimds me of KOga in a way

Hey Sha,

I really like different aspects of your story so far. I do not think that I am the only that may be having a hard time following along to your story becasue of editing issues. I would like to help. Below I took it upon myslef to edit one chapter . Can you give me your opinon on what do you think about the finished product?

Best,

Beta4u?

"Sorry"

I know that Japanese people don't have a middle name, but go with it. Now this chapter will fast forward to a week’s time.

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"You need to calm down." Ki's long time friend said watching the man pace once more.

"Easy for you to say Inu, I haven't seen my kids in almost a month and then this happens." Ki replied taking a seat on the new couch he just purchased. Now fidgeting with the arm rest.

Inu sighed as he swiped his claws through his0 long silver locks. For the entire week he spent every moment with the man. He had to restrain Ki on more than one occasion. Finally, he got him to some what relax.

They went shopping and ended up screwing that up. So he had his wife assist  them. Izayoi picked out everything and it was perfect. Now, Ki was back to square one, hysterics. His family was to arrive two hours ago, but the private jet had yet to land.

"They’re fine. They should be here in..." He was cut off when a horn sounded outside. Just as the sound ended, Ki was gone. "Now." He said to no one in particular as he smirked and followed.

Inu stood to the side as he watched the family reunite. When the car door opened a small boy ran out and pounced on Ki. He hugged him with such love as did the boy. Sota released his father and stood beside him as they watched the driver move to the back door. When the driver turned around he was carrying Ki’s daughter. As Ki took a step he paused at hearing that lovely voice he so longed to hear.

"Relax, love. She is merely asleep, the pain killers just tired her out..." Raya was preparing to say more, but soon found herself crushed to her husband's body in a demanding hug. All too eager she returned it. When he released her, he turned to the driver and took his daughter in his arms.

He smiled as he held her. He would've been lost if any one of his precious kids died. True she was nineteen, but in his eyes she would always be his little girl. As he neared the house where Inu stood, Kagome's body started to violently shake.

"What's wrong with her?" He asked as he kneeled on the ground with her still in his arms shaking. Before any could respond, her body took on an ethereal, pastel, pink light and everyone was pushed back. When this happened, Inu ducked into the house. He was still hit. His right arm was scorched, but it was already healing. Ki looked around and quickly stood in shock. There before him was his little girl in some type of barrier. He saw Raya holding a wide eyed Sota as the driver hid behind the black truck. He quickly turned to find Inu and saw nothing.

A few seconds later he had both the Tashio boys before him. Sesshoumaru the oldest and heir to the fortune as well as the title as western lord stood with such loathing. He was dressed in a customary black suit, but his jacket was gone to showcase his  white dress shirt. Long silver locks of hair was in a low atie that flowed towards his ankle. Two maroon stripes graced his cheeks as a  bluish crescent moon was on his forehead, barely visible through his long silver bangs.

The youngest, InuYasha, stood gasping for air. He, unlike his half-brother was a halfbreed and tired as he pushed his body to keep up with him. He sported a loose pair of black jeans with a chain on the left. Over that he wore a long blood red t-shirt. His hair was the shortest - a bit past his shoulders give or take a sliver strand.

Then Inu's mate, Izayoi, came. Her long onyx locks were in a beautiful bun. She wore a beige business skirt with a white dress shirt. Her shoes were long gone as she ran in fear of her mate.

"Inu!" She called out as the man in question moved to take his distressed mate in his arms. She calmed, but that left when she saw his wounded arm. "You’re hurt."

"I shall be fine." His gaze turned to the girl within the barrier."She's a miko. A powerful one for her to injure me, even if she was untrained." That drifted in the air as all watched her. Raya feared for her daughter and made to move towards her, but Ki grabbed her to prevent contact.

"She needs me."

"No, you will get...."

"No Ki, you don't understand." She shifted as she stared at her powerful daughter. "She can not hurt me. All the past miko's were in 'MY' blood line. That's why I was capable to calm her at the hospital when she lost control."

"You knew about this?" He asked accusingly.

"No, I know it's true, because I can always sense youkai. My mother had it. It makes sense." Moving her gaze back to her daughter she continued, “If I don't do this she could kill any youkai in this region. Do you want that on your conscious?"

He sighed. "After this, we will talk."

"Agreed."

"Go to her."

They all watched as Kagome's aura grew, and how  it never hurt her. Moving closer to the barrier she held her hand out and touched it.

"Kagome. Baby, let me in." When she saw her aura continue to grow she said more softly, "Baby, it's mommy, let me in so I can help. Please?" Slowly the barrier opened and she stepped inside. Once in it closed. Raya sighed as she kneeled and pulled her head into her lap. "Kagome. I know you can hear me. You need to control this, you don't want to hurt Sota or your father do you?"

"N...no." Came her hoarse voice.

Raya smiled. "Then call the power back inside. First, you must calm it."

A tear shed down her face. "I...ca...can't. It ....won't listen." The glow around the barrier got stronger and brighter as it moved to release more energy.

Inu growled as he felt his skin start to burn. He looked to the two humans and said in gruff voice, "You must have her call it back. Now!"

Raya cringed at his voice and took to the one thing that she knew would make her daughter call the power back within. "Kagome, you hurt someone with your power." She said staring directly in Inu's molten gaze. "He's your father's good friend, if you don't call it back, it can hurt him and his family. " Redirecting her gaze to her daughter she said, "Please, don't let this destroy you. Your father and I need you. Sota needs you- please, baby don't allow this to hurt innocent people."

Kagome opened her eyes to reveal pure white energy. With a small smile on her face, the barrier shattered and all the energy was released. All the youkai covered their eyes as it flowed over them. When they all looked at each other they found Inu's wound gone. Turning to the girl, all heard the one word she muttered as she fell unconscious into her mother’s loving arms.

"Sorry."

Inuyasha's mother's name is spell Izayoi 

Ah I like this, off to a good start. Made me want to read more. You didn't drone on or anything. Lovely

This story was awesome and I enjoyed it.

This REALLY needs a beta.

Just found this story today & read the entire thing from start to finish all at once. I loved & enjoyed it so much.I wish there was more  I hate to see it end.I'd even love a sequel.The final chapter left me feeling excited to whats to come. There were a few things they mentioned in this story but never gave more info on.Then I recalled the summary at the beginning mentioned something about a drabble.I've a hard time reading drabble stories as I have a hard time following.This story seemed to flow too well for a drabble story so I was unsure if that was what it was,then when I considered how this story left some things open to interpretation.Is that how it was meant to be?

In the story it mentioned Miko's,such as,Kagome were similar to youkai in the way they had an inner self that was destructive. Once she met the Taishos,her powers flared,the mark glowed,her Mom in a panic asked her to pull in her power & told her she was hurting innocent youkai freinds of her Dad. Kagome pulled her power back in & at the same time healed who she harmed,as she passed out,she whispered quietly for all to hear,I'm sorry. Her parents ,Sessh & his parents sat down together to discuss what they knew of the mark on Kagomes arm & that its a symbol that means shes part of a prophecy linked to Sessh (or one of the Taishos),the blue crescent moon was Sessh's family crest,the pink tear drop was the mark of the Miko,as she's destined to mate the one of the 2 bros that's equal to her in power.At school the bros got in a fight,her power reacted,the markings started to glow & started a pattern(of litle blue moons)wrapping up her arm,across her neck & the top of her back .At this point they needed info & called Myoga said Kagome was a destined one, most powerful & pure of heart. Once the marks starts this pattern at the end there will be a mural on her back of the one she is to Mate but, he must first earn her trust,respect but most of all ,love & she'll be granted immortality. 

Since the paragraph at the end of the last chapter...Where it mentioned 3 months later

I'd love to know about the pups. At the end when he was carrying 20 or so things of luggage & clothes while she'd walked ahead of him up the steps,at one point she said he should hurry & he said it would go faster if you grabbed some stuff & she mentioned not wanting to cause pain to the pups .As she climbed the stairs she told him something to the effect of the faster he got up there she'd be able to show him how much she loved him. He watched her go up the stairs & noticed she seemed to sashay up the steps & before following he let one thing flow in the air "Kami, knows how much I love her....And especially since she carries my pups. Not to mention her sexual appitite."

 Sessh & Kagome have mentioned that she was pregnant carrying pups .Which implies more than one & if I remember correctly Kagome is immortal now & equal in power as Sessh.how many is she expecting right now ? what the pups will be ? what they'll look like ? what kind of powers they'll have ? I imagine when mating an Inu that birthing multiple pups is like having a litter so I doubt they'll be  twins, triplets, or such ,more like a combination of both boys & girls.I can't imagine. I wondered what happened to the Jewel as it wasn't mentioned once it was removed from her body.How stupid for a teacher to take something so powerful from someones body in class.

This story was so great

Wonderful story. I thoroughly enjoyed it.

this is a very good, great, wonderful story that i like a lot and i love it too your a very great author who wrote this very great wonderful story.

I'm likeing the story so far. ^.^ Inuyasha's mom's name is spelled "Izayoi." =)

Have a great week!

~~Mizuko~~

AWWWWEE...this story was cute...i absolutly injoyed and cant wait to read the next story...thanks for an awesum story...luv ya :)

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i love this story ever since i first started reading it on single spark and now i found it again on here. and i love it and like it  a lot since i love reading it a million times becuase its really good your a really great author who wrote this really great wonderful amazing addictive really good story.

Hello,

I like your story............the plot seemed really interesting when I read what it was about on the listing.......however, when I started to read the story it self, it was full of spelling mistakes. I don't mean to be rude, but if you don't edit your story it really takes away from it and distracts any reader, interestrf or otherwise.